Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
the map illustrates the road access to a city hospital between 2007 and 2010.
at a glance, it can be observed that the hospital and the city road remains same. while, there had a public car parking area and bus station has been built at 2010.
in 2007, the city hospital was located at ring road.there was 6 bus stops at hospital road. the hospital had a staff and public car parking area and the hospital road was connected with city road.
when we came on 2010, we see that the bus stop has been transfered into a bus station and a public car parking area has been attached with the city hospital. the bus stop has been transfered at the west side.there were a change at the city road. the roundabout has been built with an attachment of hospital road and city road. the staff car parking area remained same like 2007.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You identify the broad changes between the maps, including the conversion of the bus stops into a bus station and the separation of staff and public parking. However, some key details are inaccurate or unclear: the hospital is not described as being “located at” Ring Road, and the new public car park is on the east side of Ring Road, rather than simply attached to the hospital. The overview also says the hospital and City Road remain the same, but does not capture the important addition of two roundabouts or the bus station’s access links. To strengthen the response, give a clearer overview of the main changes and describe the locations and connections precisely, including the roundabouts at both ends of Hospital Road.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a basic structure, moving from an opening and overview to separate descriptions of 2007 and 2010. This gives the reader a general sense of the comparison. However, progression within the paragraphs is uneven, and several links between ideas are unclear. For example, “the bus stop has been transfered into a bus station” is followed by “the bus stop has been transfered at the west side,” which makes it difficult to tell whether you mean the stops were replaced or relocated. The phrase “when we came on 2010” is also an awkward transition. Organise the changes by feature—bus facilities, parking, and road layout—and use clear references such as “these stops” or “the former shared car park” to connect details.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use some relevant map vocabulary, including “road access,” “bus station,” “roundabout,” and “staff car parking area,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes obscures the map details. “The bus stop has been transfered into a bus station” does not precisely describe the replacement of several stops by one station, while “attached with the city hospital” is not an accurate way to describe the public car park’s position. Spelling errors such as “transfered” also reduce control. Aim for precise location and change language, for example “was replaced by,” “to the east of,” and “was accessible directly from.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response relies mainly on short, simple statements, with limited control of more varied sentence structures. Errors in tense, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries occur frequently enough to make some relationships unclear. For instance, “the hospital and the city road remains same” has a subject–verb agreement problem and is missing an article, while “there had a public car parking area and bus station has been built at 2010” combines an incorrect construction with inconsistent tense. “There were a change” also shows an agreement error. Practise describing past maps consistently in the past tense, and check subject–verb agreement and article use. Combining related details into accurate sentences would also improve range and clarity.
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