Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The two maps dispaly the key layout changes befor and after how it will look the city hospital from 2007 and 2010.

Overall, it is clear that before city hospital had Ring road and car park staff and public. While, they changed into two separate staff car park and Bus station snd also l onk to the road.

Before, in 2007 city hospital was cover the Ring road. However, ring road was attache to the hospital road. Ans also both side of the hospital road were located bus station and also city hospital cover the large area for treatment of the people. Moreover, right side of the hopital raod made car park staff and

public staff

After, city hospital in 2010 was cover the ring raod. While, city hopitsal attached two road one is attached to eas side ad one is attached to staff car park. And here built there roundabout who attache to the hoiptal road and hospital road were connect to the noth side and south side of the roundabout. Hospital road were coonected two side of the bus station. Furthermore, public car park is located to the east side of the ciy hospital.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the two years and attempt an overview, noting the change from a shared staff-and-public car park to separate parking and the addition of a bus station. However, the overview is unclear, and several key details are inaccurate or missing. In 2007, the bus facilities were individual stops on both sides of Hospital Road, not a bus station; by 2010 these stops had been replaced by a bus station to the west. You also say the hospital was “cover[ed]” by Ring Road, which misrepresents its position, and the two roundabouts are not described clearly: they are at the Ring Road and City Road junctions. Include these main changes accurately and explain the locations more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has separate opening, overview, and year-by-year paragraphs, so the reader can recognise an intended structure. You also use basic signposts such as “Overall,” “Before,” “After,” and “Moreover.” However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow because several ideas are joined without clear relationships, as in “And here built there roundabout who attache to the hoiptal road.” Some linking words, including “While” and “However,” do not clearly express the relationship between the information that follows. References such as “here” and “both side” are also vague. Organise the comparison around the main changes—bus facilities, parking, and road junctions—and use clear location references and simpler links between sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant map vocabulary, including “Ring road,” “car park,” “east side,” “roundabout,” and “attached,” which shows an attempt to describe locations and changes. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or repeated. “Bus station” is used for the 2007 bus stops, while “cover” does not convey the hospital’s position in relation to Ring Road. Frequent spelling errors such as “dispaly,” “hopital,” and “roundabout” also make the description harder to read. Build a more precise set of terms for map changes and locations, such as “was replaced by,” “to the west of,” and “at the junction of.” Check spelling carefully and avoid repeating the same general verbs.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, and the use of time markers such as “Before” and “After” helps distinguish the two maps. However, sentence structures are often faulty, and errors frequently obscure the intended relationships. For example, “city hospital was cover the Ring road” has an incorrect verb form and unclear construction, while “Hospital road were coonected two side” has problems with agreement and sentence structure. Articles and prepositions are also often missing or misplaced, as in “attached to eas side.” Most sentences need editing before their meaning is clear. Practise accurate past-tense descriptions and basic location patterns, for example, “The car park was east of Hospital Road” and “A roundabout was added at each junction.”

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