Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
THE FOLLOWING TO MAPS DEPICTS THE CHANGES MADE TO THE ROAD SHOW ACCESS TO A CITY HOSPITAL FOR THREE YEARS
TO BEGIN WITH CITY HOSPITAL FOR THE YEAR 2007 IT IS SITUATED IN THE CENTERE OF THE ROAD ONE THE NORTH SIDE U CAN SEE A RING ROAD ON THE OTHER HAND ON THE EAST SIDE THERE IS A CAR PARKING FOR HOSPITAL STAFF AND PUBLIC ASWELLTHE CITY ROAD IS IN THE CENTERE WHICH CONNECTS TO THE HOSPITAL ON RIGHT SIDE THERE IS A BUS STOP JUST NEAR TO THE HOSPITAL ON THE EAST SIDE
ON THE OTHER HAND IN THE YEAR 2010 THE HOSPITAL HAVE GOT SOME CHANGES THE PARKING HAS BEEN SEPRATED FOR PUBLIC AND STAFF PUBLIC CAR PARKING IS SITUATED IN THE EAST SIDE ANS STAFF PARKING IS JUST NEAR BY THE ENTRANCE ON THE RIGHT ,FOLLOWING THAT BUS STATION HAS BEEN CHANGED TO THE WEST SIDE OF THE HOSPITAL ON THERE ARE TWO ROUNDABOUT IN 2010 HOSPITAL HAVE BEEN EXPANDED WITH GREAT AMMUNITES
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
You identify several relevant changes, including the separation of staff and public parking, the bus station’s move to the west, and the addition of two roundabouts. However, the response only partially reports the maps: the 2007 layout is described inaccurately, and key relationships are unclear. For example, the hospital is not simply “in the centere of the road,” and the 2007 bus stops are on both sides of Hospital Road, not just one near the hospital. The overview is also missing, while the claim that the hospital “have been expanded with great ammunites” is unsupported by the maps. To strengthen the report, summarise the main changes clearly and describe the road connections and parking locations accurately.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a basic chronological structure, moving from 2007 to 2010, and phrases such as “To begin with” and “On the other hand” signal a change of period. However, the ideas within each section are crowded together, and there is no clear overview to guide the reader through the main changes. Some connections are difficult to follow, particularly “the City Road is in the centere which connects to the hospital on right side” and “bus station has been changed to the west side … there are two roundabout.” Use separate paragraphs for an overview and each map, and group related features—for example, road access, parking, and bus facilities. More precise linking and reference would make the progression easier to follow.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “Ring Road,” “car parking,” “bus station,” and “roundabout,” so the reader can recognise the general subject. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unclear, such as “road show access,” “parking has been separated,” and “hospital have been expanded with great ammunites.” Spelling errors, including “centere,” “seprated,” and “amm unites,” also make parts of the description harder to understand. Aim for precise map language and accurate collocations, such as “road access,” “parking was divided into staff and public facilities,” and “a bus station was built.” Check spelling carefully, especially for key location terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response attempts to describe locations and changes using longer sentences, but control of sentence structure is weak and errors frequently make relationships difficult to interpret. For example, “the City Road is in the centere which connects to the hospital on right side” lacks a clear grammatical relationship, while “the hospital have got some changes” has incorrect subject–verb agreement and an unsuitable verb form. Articles and prepositions are also often missing or inaccurate, as in “on the east side” and “near by the entrance.” Most ideas are presented in long, loosely joined sentences with little punctuation. Practise writing short, complete sentences first, then combine them using accurate clauses and consistent past-tense forms.
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