Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The two maps illustrates the changes that took place in accessibility to city hospital between 2007 and 2010.

Overall,there was a significant change in the city.Staff car park bus station and public car park was renovated and separated from each other.Roundabout was added and the bus stop was removed from central.

In 2007,the city hospital was found on the northern part while city road on the south west part.Hospital road wad centrally placed surrounded by bus stop and public and staff parking beside the hospital road.

By 2010,there was a significant changes.Two rou d abouts were constructed near the city hospitsl and on the city road.Public car was moved beside the the hospital for faster movement of patients.Staff car park was renovated and located to the eastern side of city hospital and bus station to the western side of the city jospital.

In conclusion, access to city hospital developed considerably between 2007 and 2010 with improved road structure.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main overall changes: the bus stops were removed, a bus station and roundabouts were introduced, and parking was separated. You also compare the two years and describe several locations, so the response addresses the task. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: in 2007 the hospital is north of the roads, but Hospital Road is not described as being “surrounded by” bus stops and parking; the public car park was not moved beside the hospital, but a new public car park was added east of Ring Road. The overview’s claim that facilities were “renovated” is also imprecise. To strengthen the report, distinguish clearly between the existing staff/public car park becoming staff-only and the new public car park, and describe the bus station’s access.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph for 2007, a comparison with 2010, and a concluding sentence. Time markers such as “In 2007” and “By 2010” help the reader follow the changes, and the main points are generally grouped by period. This coherent overall arrangement is a strength. However, some links between ideas are abrupt, and the overview and conclusion repeat the general claim that access changed considerably without adding much detail. The sentence beginning “Overall” also runs several changes together, making their relationships unclear. Use clearer transitions to distinguish road changes from transport and parking changes, and organise the 2010 details in a consistent spatial order.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant map vocabulary, including “accessibility,” “roundabouts,” “bus station,” “staff car park,” and “eastern side,” which allows you to report the main features. There is also an attempt to use more formal language, such as “constructed” and “developed considerably.” However, several word choices are inaccurate or unnatural: “renovated” does not describe the separation or addition of facilities, and “Public car was moved” misnames the car park and misrepresents the change. Spelling errors such as “rou d abouts,” “hospitsl,” and “jospital” also reduce precision. Choose exact map labels and use verbs such as “added,” “converted,” or “designated” to describe the changes accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more developed sentence forms, and the time references make the sequence understandable. However, some errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence construction remain. For example, “The two maps illustrates” should be “The two maps illustrate,” while “Staff car park bus station and public car park was renovated” has a plural subject that requires “were,” as well as clearer punctuation. “Hospital road wad centrally placed” contains an incorrect verb form, and “there was a significant changes” mismatches the singular determiner and plural noun. Some sentences also omit necessary articles or use unclear structures. Check subject–verb agreement and singular/plural forms, and proofread punctuation so that each sentence expresses one clear comparison.

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