Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The maps illustrates the changes on road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Overall, the hospital remained to its own location, there is an addition of a parking space and a shift in the location of a roundabout. There is an addition of a bus station.

Initially, by 2007 the hospital was surrounded by the ring road which remaind same throughout 3 all three decades and the hospital road also remained on its position. In 2007 there was only one parking space for both public and staff which have a very huge improvment a32

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the broad topic and note that the hospital stayed in the same place, but the response reports only a small part of the map changes and does not provide a complete comparison. The overview is also inaccurate: the maps show no shift in a roundabout; two roundabouts were added in 2010, at the ends of Hospital Road. You mention a bus station and an additional parking area, but do not explain that the bus stops were replaced by a station, or distinguish the new public car park from the existing car park, which became staff-only. The response is 87 words, below the required 150, and ends mid-thought with “a32,” leaving the comparison unfinished. Include the main changes and their locations in a fuller summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response with an introduction, an overview beginning “Overall,” and a paragraph about the 2007 layout. This gives the reader some sense of the intended structure. However, the progression stops before the 2010 details are explained, and the final sentence is incomplete, so the account has no clear conclusion or full chronological comparison. Some linking is awkward, as in “Initially, by 2007,” and the phrase “remained same throughout 3 all three decades” makes the relationship between the maps difficult to follow. Develop separate, complete paragraphs for the overview and the key changes, using clear time markers such as “By 2010” to guide the reader.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant map vocabulary, including “surrounded,” “ring road,” “parking space,” and “bus station,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “changes on road access,” “an addition of a parking space,” and “a very huge improvement.” Spelling errors in “remaind” and “improvment” also reduce accuracy, while “a32” appears to be an accidental fragment rather than meaningful vocabulary. Use precise terms from the map, such as “car park,” “bus stops,” and “roundabouts,” and describe the changes directly rather than evaluating them as improvements.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including “Overall, the hospital remained to its own location,” but grammatical control is inconsistent and errors sometimes make the meaning unclear. For example, “The maps illustrates” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “which have a very huge improvement” does not form a clear or accurate clause. The sentence beginning “Initially, by 2007” also contains a confusing time expression and an incomplete construction around “remained same.” The response relies heavily on basic sentence patterns and does not show reliable control of longer comparisons. Practise accurate agreement, articles, and complete clauses, then check each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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