Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The two maps illustrate the road across to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

OVERVIEW: In year 2007 in city hospital there is a car parking of staff and public are on hospital road but in year 2010 pulic car parking is on ring road and staff car parking is on hospital road.

BP1: In this map he is talking about car parking in hospital in year 2007 and 2010 in year 2007 there is bus stop on city road and car parking is on hospital road .

BP2: in year 2010 bus station come on hospital road and staff car parking on city road nad in year 2010 some difference is there that in year 2007 there is no mixup in public and staff car parking but in year in 2010 there is sepration in staff car parking and public car parking and bus station come on another hospital road .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the broad change from a shared car park in 2007 to separate staff and public parking in 2010, which is relevant to the maps. However, the account is only partial and includes several inaccurate locations: the 2007 bus stops were along Hospital Road, not City Road, and the 2010 bus station was west of Hospital Road, not on it. The staff car park remained east of Hospital Road; it was not on City Road. Important changes such as the two roundabouts and the removal of the individual bus stops are omitted. The response is also below the required 150 words: 145 words were counted, excluding eight copied prompt words. Develop a clear overview and accurately describe the main changes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic division into an overview and two body paragraphs, and the year labels give the reader some sense of comparison. However, the progression is difficult to follow: BP1 repeats the parking topic without clearly organising the 2007 and 2010 details, while BP2 combines several claims in a long, loosely connected sentence. Phrases such as “in year 2010” recur, and “in this map he is talking about” does not clearly refer to the maps or a specific feature. Use paragraphs to group the 2007 layout and the 2010 changes, and connect each comparison explicitly. This would make the information easier to follow rather than relying on repeated labels.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “car parking,” “bus stop,” “bus station,” and “separation,” so the reader can recognise the general subject. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “road across,” “car parking of staff and public,” and “bus station come on hospital road.” Spelling errors, including “pulic,” “nad,” and “sepration,” also reduce clarity and control. Choose precise map vocabulary and collocations—for example, “road access,” “shared car park,” “was located,” and “was replaced by a bus station.” Check spelling carefully, especially in key labels, and avoid repeating the same basic terms when a more exact description is available.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response communicates a few basic comparisons, but grammatical control is inconsistent and sentence structures are very limited. For example, “In year 2007 in city hospital there is a car parking … are on hospital road” has problems with articles, tense, and subject–verb agreement. The long sentence beginning “in year 2010 bus station come…” also lacks clear grammatical links between its ideas, and tense shifts between “there is” and past-time descriptions. Use past-tense forms consistently for both maps and build shorter, complete sentences, such as “In 2007, the hospital had a shared car park east of Hospital Road.” Then practise combining details with accurate clauses, while checking articles and agreement.

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