Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagrams illustrate the changes that took place in the road access to a city hospital between 2007 and 2010 and many changes were made.

Overall, it is clear that the hospital has a significiant redevelopment during this period. And most noticable changes are in the ring road, bus station and reallocation of parking areas.

Firstly, in 2007 there is a hospital road and the buses are parked near the road and it also connect to the city raod. Furthermore, the city hospital was surrounded by a road and there was a large car park for both staff and public.

By 2010, the city hospital was at its right place but the ring road was modernised by introducing roundabouts which provided easier access to vehicles. Therefore, a new bus station was built in the south-west side and the car parking area is now seprated staff car park is in the south east side of the hospital moreover, the public car park is in the east side.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main kinds of change and provide a clear overall summary, noting redevelopment, roundabouts, a bus station and the separation of parking. Several details are relevant, including the shared staff-and-public car park in 2007 and the new public car park in 2010. However, some features are incomplete or imprecise: the bus stops are described as buses “parked near the road,” and the new bus station is placed in the south-west, although it lies west of Hospital Road and connects at both ends. The staff car park’s position is also not clearly stated. The overview is present, but fuller, more accurate comparisons of the road layout and removed bus stops would make the report more complete and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate descriptions of the two years. This gives the reader a generally coherent route through the information, and time markers such as “in 2007” and “By 2010” help signal the comparison. Some links are mechanical or unclear, however. The overview begins a new sentence with “And,” while “Therefore” does not express a clear cause-and-effect relationship. The final sentence also joins several changes with “moreover” without clear punctuation or separation, making the locations harder to follow. To strengthen progression, group related changes together and use precise links to show contrast or addition, rather than relying on a long chain of clauses.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “redevelopment,” “roundabouts,” “reallocation,” and “separated,” and the main meaning is generally understandable. There are, however, several inaccurate or awkward choices that reduce precision. “Buses are parked” mislabels the bus stops, “at its right place” does not clearly describe the hospital’s unchanged position, and “modernised” is a broad interpretation rather than a precise description of the road changes. Spelling errors such as “significiant,” “noticable,” “raod,” and “seprated” also weaken control. Aim for exact map vocabulary and check spelling; terms such as “bus stops,” “located,” and “redesigned” would communicate the features more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including clauses linked with “which” and “and,” and the reader can usually understand the intended meaning. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly in verb forms, agreement, and sentence boundaries. For example, “the hospital has a significiant redevelopment” needs a more suitable verb construction, while “it also connect” lacks subject–verb agreement. “And most noticable changes…” is a sentence fragment, and the final sentence runs several clauses together without adequate punctuation. There is also a tense shift between past descriptions and present forms such as “is now.” Use past tense consistently for the dated maps, and divide the final sequence into shorter, complete sentences to improve accuracy and control.

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