Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

City Hospital is the main hospital that need easier access through transporation, here's how it has been changened comparing 2007 to 2010

It has parking for both the hospital's Staff and visitors.

Althuogh the city hospital location didn't change but many improvement has been done to the area surroundered by the hospital including: parking area, bus station and roads around.

In 2007 the city hospital was near to bus stop which gives easier access for people who use public transporation. It has only 1 parking for both hospital employess and visitor. Which has been changed in 2010 and seperater the parking into 2 parking areas: one area for city hospital employees and the other area for visitors and patients.

the bus station has been changed as well in 2010 from being on the right side of the road as bus stop to a whole bus station infront of hospital road .

The area that was bus station in 2007 has been changed to public car parking areea for visiors as part of the hospital connected with the ring road.

2 roundsabout has been added in 2010 where hospital road is in between those circles.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main kinds of change: the shared car park became separate staff and public facilities, bus stops were replaced by a bus station, and two roundabouts were added. You also note that the hospital itself stayed in the same location. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: the bus station is west of Hospital Road, not “in front of” it, and the public car park is east of the Ring Road rather than simply the former bus-stop area. The response also does not clearly explain that the staff car park remains east of Hospital Road or that the new public car park has direct access from the Ring Road. A more precise overview and clearer location comparisons would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic sequence, moving from general changes to the 2007 and 2010 features, and phrases such as “In 2007” and “in 2010” help orient the reader. However, the progression is not consistently clear: the opening repeats the idea of improved access, while the later paragraph about the public car park refers vaguely to “the area that was bus station,” making the relationship between the maps difficult to follow. Paragraphing is limited, and several ideas are joined in long sentences with unclear links. Organise the response into a brief overview followed by a paragraph comparing transport changes and another covering parking and road changes. Use clear references such as “the former bus stops” only where they accurately describe the map.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “parking,” “bus station,” “public transportation,” and “roundabout,” so the reader can identify the main features. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the description less precise, including “transporation,” “changened,” “seperater,” and “areea.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “parking for both the hospital’s Staff and visitors” and “infront of hospital road.” Aim for accurate map vocabulary and natural collocations, for example, “car park,” “bus stops,” “located to the west of,” and “direct access from.” Proofreading spelling and choosing precise location terms would make the information easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and longer sentence forms, including a contrast with “Although the city hospital location didn’t change” and a sentence describing how the parking was divided. However, errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between features unclear. Examples include “the main hospital that need,” “many improvement has been done,” and “2 roundsabout has been added,” where agreement and plural forms are not controlled. Sentence boundaries and punctuation also need attention: the opening ends without a full stop, and “It has only 1 parking… Which has been changed” creates an incomplete sentence. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, plurals, and complete sentences before adding more complex structures.

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