Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The two multiple pictures demonstrates pathway which approch the hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Overall, the major diiference is of junction in scond picture. Furthermore, in first picture the car park, staff and public is together. On the other hand in second picture it shows sepration of parking.

Firstly, the city hospital in 2007 is in small area, while in 2010 area were expanded. Moreover, the car parking of staff and public is together and bus stopo is in the southern side of hospital in 2007.

Secondly, the development in 2010 is of expanding area of hospital. The parking of staff is in southern of hospital, then bus station is in the west side and opposite to the parking of staff. Furthermore, the public parking is in the east side of hospital. Lastly, the major modification is of making junctions connecting the areas and enterance together in one path and expanding the area.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the broad changes between the maps, especially the separation of staff and public parking and the replacement of bus stops with a bus station. However, the account is only partly accurate and developed. The hospital is described as being in a “small area” in 2007 and as having an “expanded” area in 2010, but the maps do not show the hospital itself expanding. The bus stops were along Hospital Road, not on its southern side, and the public car park is east of the Ring Road rather than simply east of the hospital. You also mention junctions, but do not clearly explain the two roundabouts at the ends of Hospital Road. Focus on precise, map-supported changes and give a clearer overview of the main access improvements.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an opening, an overview, and paragraphs beginning “Firstly” and “Secondly.” This helps the reader distinguish the two time periods. However, progression is not consistently clear: the overview repeats details that are then repeated in the body, and the final sentence introduces “expanding the area” without establishing what area is meant. Linking phrases such as “Moreover,” “Furthermore,” and “Lastly” are used, but they sometimes connect ideas mechanically rather than show their exact relationship. Organise the body around the main changes—for example, road junctions and bus access, followed by parking—and use clear references to the 2007 and 2010 layouts to avoid repetition and ambiguity.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant map vocabulary, including “car park,” “bus station,” “junction,” and “separation,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which makes some descriptions unclear. For example, “multiple pictures” is not a natural way to refer to maps, “pathway which approch the hospital” does not clearly describe road access, and “parking of staff” is less precise than a standard map description. Spelling errors such as “diiference,” “scond,” “sepration,” and “enterance” are also noticeable. Build a more accurate set of terms for locations and changes, such as “to the east of,” “was replaced by,” and “access road.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a few longer sentences using contrast and sequencing, as in “The city hospital in 2007 is in small area, while in 2010 area were expanded.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in agreement, articles, tense, and sentence construction frequently make the meaning difficult to follow. For instance, “pictures demonstrates” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “in 2010 area were expanded” lacks a clear article and uses an unsuitable verb form. The phrase “the major modification is of making junctions” is also structurally awkward. Use straightforward comparative sentences first, keeping the past tense consistent: “In 2010, two roundabouts were added at the ends of Hospital Road.” Then check each sentence for a clear subject, verb, and article.

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