Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The diagram below demonstrate the maps those show access of road to city hospital between 2007 to 2010.
Overall, it illustrates the changing in position of some locations in road maps in two different year however, the city hospital, hospital road and city road is comparatively same in both and the public and staff car parking is significantly changed.
In first map in 2007 the hospital is situated at the center of the map with four sides. The city road is present at the south side of the hospital that is goes straight and have a turn towards hospital road. Moreover, this road is passing from the center of the bus stop and car parking area of the public and staff that is at the south side then it meets to the junction of ring road that is around the hospital.
In the second map in 2010 contain minor changing the location of public and staff car parking one at the east and other at the south side. Moreover, the bus stop contain two round about to travel from various roads such as hospital road, ring road and city road.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the maps, such as the changes in parking and the addition of roundabouts. However, the description is somewhat superficial. For instance, the mention of 'four sides' is vague, and the explanation of the road layout is difficult to follow. While the main trends are identified, the comparison between 2007 and 2010 lacks precision in describing the spatial relationships. To improve, focus on clearly contrasting the specific locations (e.g., 'the staff car park was relocated from the south to the east') rather than listing features in a disjointed manner. The overview is present but could be more analytical regarding the overall impact of the changes.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader navigate the information. However, the logical progression is hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical use of cohesive devices. For example, 'In first map in 2007' and 'In the second map in 2010' are repetitive transitions. Some sentences are difficult to parse, such as the description of the city road passing through the bus stop. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each sentence flows naturally into the next. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to track the specific changes being described.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward word choice, such as 'changing' used as a noun instead of 'changes' or 'alterations', and 'comparatively same' instead of 'remained largely unchanged'. The range is limited, relying on basic descriptors. To improve, incorporate more precise terminology for describing maps, such as 'relocated', 'constructed', 'extended', or 'remained constant'. Avoid repeating the same sentence structures and vocabulary when describing the two time periods.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('The diagram below demonstrate', 'the bus stop contain'), incorrect prepositions ('access of road to'), and missing articles ('in first map'). These errors are noticeable and occasionally impede the flow of information. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that articles are used correctly. Proofreading for common errors like pluralisation and tense consistency would significantly enhance the clarity of your writing.
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