Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given map illustrate road access to city hospital between 2007 and 2010.

Overall, to give a quick view so many changes and also newly added before and after. Public cark park, two roundabout these things are newly added in 2010.

To start with, city hospital In 2007, does not have the car park however In 2010, the public car park was added in the eastern side. In 2007, there were hospital road and also a small space for public and staff car park while, In 2010 there was a change in hospital road. In addition, There were 2 roundabout they added and also attached with bus station.

Furthermore, city roads did not have any roundabouts however, it added now. Moreover, the car park was for public and staff but now it was just used for hospital staff. There was a six bus tops in 2007. However, the bus station now bigger than before.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response identifies the main features of the maps, such as the addition of roundabouts and the changes to the car park. However, the report lacks precision and clarity. For example, the description of the bus station as 'bigger than before' is vague, and the mention of 'six bus tops' (likely bus stops) in 2007 is not clearly contrasted with the 2010 layout. The overview is somewhat disjointed and lacks a clear summary of the most significant changes. To improve, ensure that all key features are clearly described with accurate spatial references and that the comparison between the two years is more systematic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'In 2007' and 'In 2010' at the start of sentences. Some transitions, like 'Overall, to give a quick view so many changes', are awkward and do not flow naturally. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult to track which specific road or facility is being discussed. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring clear logical progression between sentences would significantly enhance the coherence of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is limited and sometimes inaccurate, which occasionally hinders the clarity of the report. Phrases like 'these things are newly added' and 'small space for public and staff car park' are simplistic. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'bus tops' instead of 'bus stops'. While the student attempts to describe the map features, the range of vocabulary is not sufficient to demonstrate flexibility or precision. To reach a higher band, the student should focus on using more specific terminology related to maps and urban planning, such as 'constructed', 'relocated', 'expanded', or 'junction'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The given map illustrate', 'There were 2 roundabout') and incorrect verb tenses ('it added now'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary commas and capitalization errors (e.g., 'In 2007, does not have'). While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on consistent tense usage and correct sentence construction will help improve the accuracy and overall quality of the writing.

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