Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

According these two pictures, we can feel the great change between 2007 and 2010 and show the hard work of government.

In 2007, you could drive your vehicles to the city hospital by Hospital Road, and then parked at the Car park which was shared with the staff. The bus station showed in the 2007 suggested this was the most popular hosiptal for the citizens. Therefore, we have sufficient evidence to doubt the space for the staff and public was not enough. Moreover, the gate was narrow and there was only one single road to entered the hosptial, hence there might be rush during the Monday to Friday.

However, in 2010, obviously the government made lots of change in this place, like they added a new car park which was only opened to the public, while the old one was still available for the staff. they also built two roundabout to reduce the stress of transport. Bus station was a smart change, it help the citizen to have more options to the hosptial.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

该回答涵盖了地图的主要特征，例如新增的停车场和环岛。然而，分析受到了主观评论的阻碍，例如 'we can feel the great change' 和 'we have sufficient evidence to doubt'，这对于学术类写作任务 1 的报告来说是不合适的。该任务要求对视觉数据进行客观总结，而不是个人观点或对政府表现的推测。虽然识别出了主要变化，但缺乏客观报道以及包含不相关的个人评论，限制了得分的提高。

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

该回答按段落组织，有助于读者跟随从 2007 年到 2010 年的发展进程。然而，衔接手段的使用有时显得机械或误用，例如 'Therefore' 和 'Moreover'，它们未能将前文观点与后续论点逻辑地连接起来。指代有时不明确，句子之间的衔接也有些脱节。虽然整体结构是合乎逻辑的，但内部连贯性需要更多的多样性和精确性才能获得更高的分数。

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

词汇量对于该任务来说足够，但缺乏更高分数所需的精确度和广度。存在一些拼写错误，如 'hosiptal' 和 'hosptial'，以及一些生硬的搭配，如 'reduce the stress of transport'。词汇范围有限，依赖于基础描述词。若要提升，你应该专注于使用与城市规划和地图描述相关的更精确术语，例如 'infrastructure'、'accessibility'、'segregated' 和 'junctions'。

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

该回答包含了简单句和复杂句的混合，但频繁的语法错误偶尔会阻碍清晰度。例子包括 'According these two pictures'（缺少介词）、'there was only one single road to entered'（动词形式错误）以及 'Bus station was a smart change'（缺少冠词）。标点符号也不一致。虽然意思大体上可以理解，但基础语法和句子结构中的错误频率限制了得分。

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