Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The maps show the changes made to the road access of a city hospital between 2007 and 2010.
overall the hospital became easier to reach in 2010.The main changes are the construction of two maps. a new bus station and car park for staff and the public.
In 2007 the hospital was around by a ring road. Hospital road are the connected the hospital to city road in the south.There were six bus stop with there on each side of hospital road here was one shared car park used by both staff and the public, located on the east side of Hospital Road.
By 2010 the road system had been improve.he bus stops were removed and replaced by a bus station on the west side of Hospital Road. Two were added.one at the junction of Hospital Road and City Road, and another at the entrance to the hospital ring road. The shared car park was divided into two separate parking areas. A staff car park was beside Hospital Road while a larger public car park was constructed to the east of the hospital and connected directly to the ring road.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the maps, identifying the key changes such as the bus station, the new roundabouts, and the parking arrangements. However, the overview is slightly confusing, as it mentions the 'construction of two maps' instead of referring to the road infrastructure. While the main trends are identified, the description of the 2007 layout is somewhat imprecise, and the report lacks a clear, professional summary of the overall transformation. The response addresses the task requirements, but the lack of clarity in the overview and some minor inaccuracies in reporting the spatial details prevent it from reaching a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, moving from an introduction to the 2007 layout and then the 2010 changes. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate. For example, the transition 'Two were added' lacks a clear subject, making the connection between sentences disjointed. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the flow of information is occasionally interrupted by grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, which makes the progression of ideas feel less smooth. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring clear referencing would significantly enhance the coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the writer to describe the changes in the road network. There are some attempts at more specific terminology, such as 'junction' and 'infrastructure' (implied), but the range is limited. There are also noticeable errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'around' instead of 'surrounded' and 'improve' instead of 'improved'. These errors do not impede communication, but they demonstrate a lack of precision. To improve, the student should focus on using more varied and accurate descriptive language related to maps and urban planning.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles ('a new bus station'), incorrect verb forms ('road system had been improve'), and punctuation issues. Some sentences are fragmented or lack necessary subjects, such as 'Two were added'. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of these errors indicates a lack of control over complex structures. The student needs to focus on subject-verb agreement, consistent tense usage, and basic sentence construction to improve accuracy.
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