Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The maps demonstrate the comparison of modifications of road utilisation to metropolitan medical centre in two various years mainly 2007 and 2010.
Overall, it is noticeable that there are major difference in the layout of road in 2007 as compared as 2010 and some places accepted their own priority.
Firstly, the maps illustrate the data regarding in 2007 city hospital surrounded by ring road which linked with car park for staff and individuals.In addition, through the hospital Rd which engaged by bus stops at both sides west and east every one could commute to the city side via city road which separated by three layers.
However, there were extreme changes experienced in 2010.The main construction was two parking areas built up one only for staffs and another one only for masses.Apart from this, hospital Rd connected with newly constructed bus station from city hospitals as well as city road.It was used by roundabouts in 2010.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the maps, such as the changes to the road layout, the addition of roundabouts, and the new parking facilities. However, the description is somewhat superficial. For example, the mention of 'three layers' on the city road is unclear and does not accurately reflect the visual information provided. While the main changes are identified, the comparison between 2007 and 2010 could be more precise, particularly regarding the specific locations of the new bus station and the access points. The overview is present but lacks a clear synthesis of the most significant changes, such as the transition from a simple ring road to a more complex system with roundabouts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression from the 2007 layout to the 2010 changes. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate, such as 'as compared as 2010' and 'Apart from this'. The referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly when describing the location of the bus stops and the new parking areas. While the overall arrangement is coherent, the flow between sentences is occasionally interrupted by awkward phrasing, which makes the progression of ideas feel slightly disjointed at times.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision. There are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'modifications of road utilisation', 'accepted their own priority', and 'masses' (when referring to the public). The phrase 'city hospital surrounded by ring road' is grammatically incomplete. While the student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'roundabouts' and 'construction', the overall control is limited, and some expressions are unnatural, which occasionally hinders the clarity of the description.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include missing articles ('in 2007 city hospital'), incorrect prepositions ('data regarding in 2007'), and awkward sentence construction ('the maps demonstrate the comparison of modifications'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence structure prevents the response from reaching a higher band. More attention to subject-verb agreement and article usage is required.
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