Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
It is a city hospital which is located near the ring road and this hospital start the service in 2007 when we start to walking on the east area there is located stop for car park which is available just for staff and public . Here is two part of the road one is car park and the other path going to hospital road on the other hand if ee going straight there is two roads attach one is city road and the other road is going to the side of city hospital which is newly located in 2010 the difference in this year public car park is located on the top of the east side which is sperated with the staff car park now both car park location is different now . On the left side bus station is located .Hospital road and city road joined to gather for public.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to describe the changes between the two maps, but it fails to provide a clear overview or a logical summary of the main features. The description is fragmented and lacks a structured approach, making it difficult to follow the changes over time. Key features, such as the introduction of the roundabout and the relocation of the bus station, are mentioned in a confusing manner. The response lacks a clear comparison between 2007 and 2010, and the information provided is often inaccurate or poorly articulated, failing to meet the requirements for a clear, analytical report.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks logical organization. It is written as a single, run-on paragraph with very few cohesive devices. The progression of ideas is disjointed, and the reader struggles to identify the relationship between the different parts of the hospital access routes. Referencing is unclear, particularly when the writer uses phrases like 'here is two part of the road' or 'the other path', which do not clearly link to the visual information. There is no effective use of paragraphing or logical sequencing to guide the reader through the comparison.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The writer relies on basic, imprecise language such as 'two part of the road', 'going to', and 'attach'. There is a lack of specific terminology required for describing maps, such as 'intersection', 'roundabout', 'relocated', or 'adjacent'. Spelling errors, such as 'sperated' and 'gather', further detract from the quality of the writing. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information accurately or with any degree of sophistication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, including run-on sentences and fragments. Subject-verb agreement is often incorrect, for example, 'this hospital start the service' and 'there is two roads'. Punctuation is largely absent or misused, making the text difficult to parse. The writer uses only simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex descriptions result in grammatical confusion. The high frequency of errors makes the text difficult to read.
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