Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

This diagram illustrates the road access to the hospital in 2007 and 2010. Which mainly highlights the hospital entrance, and parking space.

In 2007 the structure of the hospital was so simple there was bus stops on the left and right side of the hospital road, which is very convenient for the public, but the car parking for the stuff and public is on the same place which creates a little mess. The city road passes along with the hospital road in the southeast corner.

In 2010 the hospital roads were so well designed according to the modern era, and more accessible for public. It includes two roundabouts which connects bus station, hospital road, and stuff car parking the public car parking is on the southeast side which is connected by the ring road. The good thing is in this diagram the parking area for stuff and public is designed separated.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the maps, such as the addition of roundabouts and the separation of parking areas. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, the description of the 2007 layout as 'so simple' is subjective rather than analytical. While the main changes are identified, the report lacks a clear overview or summary statement that synthesises the key trends (e.g., the transition from a single access point to a more complex, segregated traffic system). The comparison between the two years is present but could be more precise regarding the specific locations of the new infrastructure.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into three paragraphs, which is appropriate for this task. There is a logical progression from the introduction to the 2007 layout, followed by the 2010 changes. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and limited. For example, the transition between the description of the 2007 layout and the 2010 changes could be smoother. Additionally, the sentence structure in the introduction is fragmented, with the second sentence starting with 'Which', which disrupts the flow of information. More varied linking words would improve the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and sophistication. There is some repetition of basic terms like 'hospital road' and 'car parking'. The use of informal language, such as 'creates a little mess' and 'the good thing is', is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 report, which requires a formal, objective tone. Furthermore, there are errors in word choice, such as 'stuff' instead of 'staff'. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise terminology related to urban planning and infrastructure, such as 'segregated', 'facilitated', or 'redesigned'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. For example, 'there was bus stops' should be 'there were bus stops' (subject-verb agreement). The introduction contains a sentence fragment: 'Which mainly highlights the hospital entrance, and parking space.' Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors in basic grammar and sentence construction limit the score. Increasing the variety of complex structures while ensuring accuracy would significantly improve this score.

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