Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The two below maps show to the road access to a city hospital in 2007 to 2010.The more information by the selecting and the reporting to the main features and make comparisons to the relevant.
Overall, the city hospital in 2007 in the ring road and the attach the car parking staff and the public. The city hospital 2007 in the small. The 2007 hospital near by the ring road. The city hospital 2010 and near by the ring road and attach the public parking in the hospital. The city hospital change in the city hospital 2010. The staff parking in the safe of the hospital road, and attach the bus station in the hospital road.
The city hospital 2007 is the very small and the city hospital 2010 is the very large in the city. The city hospital 2007in the bus station in the many distance in the city hospital 2007.
The city hospital in the 2010 is the very large and the bus station is the attach of the the city hospital. The city hospital in the 2010 near by the ring road.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to describe the maps, but it fails to provide a clear summary of the main features or significant changes. The information is presented in a fragmented and repetitive manner, making it difficult to identify the key trends, such as the addition of the roundabout or the relocation of the bus station. The description of the hospital size is inaccurate based on the provided visual data, and the lack of a clear overview or logical grouping of information means the task is only partially addressed. To improve, you must focus on identifying the most important changes and grouping them logically rather than listing details in a disjointed way.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks logical progression. Ideas are presented in short, repetitive sentences that do not flow into one another. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas, and the paragraphing is ineffective, as the text does not follow a clear structure (e.g., introduction, overview, and specific details). The referencing is often unclear, such as using 'the city hospital' repeatedly without specifying which year or feature is being discussed. To improve, use linking words like 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'subsequently' to connect your sentences and ensure each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic words like 'big', 'small', and 'attach', which are often used incorrectly in this context (e.g., 'attach the bus station'). There is no attempt to use vocabulary related to map description, such as 'located', 'situated', 'constructed', or 'relocated'. The frequent misuse of words makes it difficult to follow the description of the changes. To improve, learn specific collocations for describing maps and diagrams, and try to vary your word choice to avoid repeating the same phrases throughout the response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, including missing verbs, incorrect prepositions (e.g., 'in the 2007'), and faulty article usage. Most sentences are simple and lack the complexity required for higher bands. Many sentences are grammatically incomplete or nonsensical, such as 'The city hospital 2007 in the small.' To improve, focus on basic sentence construction: ensure every sentence has a clear subject, verb, and object. Practice using prepositions of place correctly and work on subject-verb agreement to reduce the frequency of errors.
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