Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The two maps illustrates road access in 2007 and 2010 to a city hospital.
The city hospital same site in the both years 2007 and 2010.
there are many changes in 2010.in 2007
ring road simple just availabe city road and hospital road.car park present in 2007.
in 2010 there are add bus station staff car park and public car park.public car park added with city hospital.and bus station add with hospital rod in left side and staff car park add right side.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 83 words. This significantly impacts the ability to fully address the task. While the student attempts to identify the main features, such as the addition of the bus station and car parks, the description is fragmented and lacks the necessary detail and comparative analysis required for an Academic Task 1 response. The overview is missing, and the information is presented in a disjointed manner, failing to provide a clear summary of the changes between 2007 and 2010.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks logical organization and progression. There is no clear paragraph structure, and the sentences are disconnected. The use of cohesive devices is almost entirely absent, making the text difficult to follow. The lack of transition words or logical sequencing means that the information is presented as a series of isolated observations rather than a coherent report. The punctuation is also inconsistent, further hindering the flow of the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic terms like 'add' and 'present' throughout the text. There is no attempt to use a range of vocabulary suitable for describing maps or trends (e.g., 'constructed,' 'relocated,' 'expanded,' or 'remained unchanged'). The phrasing is often unnatural, such as 'bus station add with hospital rod,' which indicates a lack of control over word choice and collocation. The range is insufficient to convey the information clearly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The two maps illustrates'), missing articles, and incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'bus station add'). Sentence structures are simple and often incomplete or grammatically incorrect. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures, and the persistent errors in basic grammar make the text difficult to read and understand.
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