Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The diagram illustrates the information about the road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
As can be seen from the diagram road of 2007 city hospital was simple than of 2010. In 2007 city hospital was surrounded by ring road . Taking a right turn through city road hospital road appeared and it is surrounded by 3 bus stops each on both sides and there was a availability of car park for staff and public on the right side of hospital road to reach over there take a right turn from the hospital road and it over there downside.
In the year 2010, parking facility get changed and public car park is right side of the ring road of city hospital and staff car park is at the same place as it was in 2007. take a right turn from a roundabout of city road to reach hospital road and in the west there was a bus station.
To conclude, in the year 2010, more facility were developed like station to gather buses in it and different parking areas to avoid unnecessary conflict.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the maps, such as the changes to parking and the introduction of a bus station. However, the description of the layout is often confusing and lacks precision. For example, phrases like 'it over there downside' are vague and do not accurately convey the spatial relationships shown in the diagrams. While the main trends are identified, the report lacks a clear overview or summary of the most significant changes, which is a requirement for a higher band. The information is presented in a somewhat disjointed manner, making it difficult for the reader to visualize the changes between 2007 and 2010.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow within them is weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often mechanical or misused, such as the transition 'Taking a right turn through city road'. Referencing is frequently unclear; for instance, it is not always evident what 'it' refers to in sentences like 'and it is surrounded by 3 bus stops'. The progression of ideas is not smooth, and the lack of clear signposting makes the comparison between the two years feel repetitive rather than analytical. Improved use of linking words and clearer referencing would significantly enhance the coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple descriptors. There are frequent inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'road of 2007 city hospital was simple than of 2010' and 'station to gather buses'. The student struggles to use precise terminology for map descriptions, often resorting to informal or unclear phrasing like 'get changed' or 'over there'. To reach a higher band, the student needs to incorporate more specific vocabulary related to spatial descriptions, such as 'situated', 'adjacent to', 'relocated', or 'constructed'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include missing articles ('surrounded by ring road'), incorrect verb tenses ('parking facility get changed'), and awkward sentence construction ('there was a availability of car park'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some sentences lacking proper capitalization or ending punctuation. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence structure prevents the response from reaching a higher band score.
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