Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The process chart illustrates the road access to a city hospital between 2007 and 2010.
Overall, according to chart after three year, it was seen tremendous development in new hospital. They made public car park and near the hospital build a bus station. In addition, They made the two roundabout it helps decreasing traffic.
In 2007, hospital situated in north ring road. firstly there were not have any public spaces. However, They built the new parking for general public it was beneficial because now they do not face problem of parking. Second one is Front of hospital build two roundabout. Initially they build roundabout centre of city road. Before hospital entrance did not have the roundabout, but in 2010, they made the new roundabout. Furthermore, they build the new private car parking especially for hospitals staffs. In addition, left side of hospital road they developed new bus station in 2010, it connected with both roundabout.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the maps, noting the addition of the bus station, the two roundabouts, and the two car parks. However, the description is somewhat disorganized and lacks a clear, professional overview. While the main changes are identified, the reporting is slightly repetitive and lacks precision in describing the spatial relationships (e.g., 'near the hospital build a bus station'). To reach a higher band, you should focus on grouping information more logically—perhaps by separating infrastructure changes from traffic flow changes—and ensuring the overview highlights the most significant transformations rather than just listing them.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as 'Second one is Front of hospital build two roundabout.' The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial changes. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus. Currently, the transition between the 2007 state and the 2010 changes is somewhat abrupt and lacks smooth logical flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. Phrases like 'They made' and 'They built' are used frequently, which restricts the range of expression. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'it was seen tremendous development' (should be 'there was a tremendous development') and 'hospital situated in north ring road' (missing articles). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic meaning, it lacks the flexibility and precision required for higher bands. Expanding your repertoire of verbs and nouns related to urban development would be highly beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include missing articles ('in north ring road'), incorrect verb tenses ('Initially they build'), and awkward sentence construction ('Before hospital entrance did not have the roundabout'). While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and punctuation prevents the text from reaching a higher band. You should focus on mastering subject-verb agreement, the correct use of articles, and ensuring that your sentences are complete and grammatically sound.
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