Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The process chart illustrates the road access to a city hospital between 2007 and 2010.
Overall, according to chart after three year, it was seen tremendous development in new hospital. They made public car park and near the hospital build a bus station. In addition, They made the two roundabout it helps decreasing traffic.
In 2007, hospital was situated in north ring road. firstly there were no have any public spaces. However, they built the new parking for the general public it was beneficial because now they do not face problem of parking. Second one is Front of hospital build two roundabout. Initially they build roundabout centre of city road. Before hospital entrance did not have the roundabout, but in 2010, they made the new roundabout. Furthermore, they build the new private car parking especially for hospitals staffs. In addition, left side of hospital road they developed new bus station in 2010, it connected with both roundabout.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the maps, such as the addition of the public car park, the bus station, and the roundabouts. However, the description is somewhat repetitive and lacks precision in spatial referencing. While the main changes are identified, the overview is slightly underdeveloped and relies on informal phrasing like 'tremendous development'. To reach a higher band, you should focus on grouping information more logically—for instance, by categorizing changes into 'infrastructure for vehicles' and 'facilities for the public'—and ensure that the comparison between 2007 and 2010 is more clearly articulated through precise vocabulary rather than simple chronological listing.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'Second one is Front of hospital build two roundabout'. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly within the second paragraph where the transition between the parking and the roundabouts feels abrupt. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult to track which specific part of the map is being described. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each sentence flows naturally from the previous one would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic verbs like 'made' and 'build'. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'no have any public spaces' and 'decreasing traffic', which should be 'reducing traffic'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic meaning of the task, it lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You should aim to incorporate more specific terminology related to urban planning and map description, such as 'constructed', 'implemented', 'situated', or 'adjacent to', to demonstrate a more sophisticated command of the language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but grammatical errors are frequent and occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('They made the two roundabout'), incorrect tense usage ('Initially they build'), and missing articles or prepositions ('hospital was situated in north ring road'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some sentences lacking proper capitalization or ending punctuation. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring consistent verb tenses when describing past events, and paying closer attention to article usage (e.g., 'the' hospital, 'a' roundabout).
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