Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

We are going to discuss about the difference of city hospital of 2007 and 2010. In 2007 the parking fecilities were less so every one has to adjust their vehicals in the parking so it is necessary to renovate the parking space. parking is on the right side in 2007 and every vehicle were parked their and the city hospital road is also thin so only 1 time 1 car can go from the road .

City hospital after renovation in 2010 the hospital canstracts proper roads and parking area for cars , buses, and for the staff for car parking so everyone can get proper facilities to park their vehicle safe and because of proper canstructed road everyone can get the space to move car or other vehicale to other place . Public car parking are bigger then everyone and staff parking comes on the second place in the last buss station has the less place to park so this is the changes done in 2010.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to describe the changes between the two maps, but it fails to provide a clear, objective summary. Instead of focusing on the visual data, the text includes subjective commentary, such as 'it is necessary to renovate the parking space,' which is not required for an Academic Task 1 report. Furthermore, the description of the changes is disorganized and lacks a clear overview of the main trends. Key features, such as the addition of a roundabout or the specific changes to road access, are not clearly identified or compared. The response relies on informal language and personal opinion rather than a formal analysis of the provided information.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks a logical structure. While there are two paragraphs, the ideas within them are not sequenced effectively. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas, making the text feel disjointed. For example, the transition between the description of the 2007 map and the 2010 map is abrupt. Referencing is often unclear, particularly when referring to 'everyone' or 'the city hospital road.' The paragraphing does not follow a logical progression, and the overall flow is hindered by the lack of clear signposting or logical connectors.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'fecilities' (facilities), 'vehicals' (vehicles), 'canstracts' (constructs), and 'buss' (bus). The word choice is often informal or imprecise, such as 'adjust their vehicals' and '1 time 1 car can go.' The student struggles to use appropriate terminology for describing maps or spatial changes. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information accurately, and the persistent spelling errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding of the intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often distort the intended meaning. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, tense consistency (mixing present and past), and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or lack proper punctuation, such as 'parking is on the right side in 2007 and every vehicle were parked their and the city hospital road is also thin.' The use of complex structures is absent, and the basic sentence patterns are often flawed. These errors are pervasive and significantly impact the clarity of the writing.

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