Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The two maps below demostrate how road access to a city hopital revolutionized from the year 2007 to till 2010 ( interval of 3 years period).

Overall, the main location of the city hospital and ring road remained constant while substantial change is the addition of three roundabout in new map. Moreover, the location of bus stop is shifted to near hospital Rd and extra car park for public is made attached to Ring Road while car park staff remained in its original place.

In the map of 2007,there only simple roads such as ring road, city road were accessed to hospital but in 2010 two huge rounabout were made in northern and sounthern side of Hospital Rd. Similarly the bus station area were transformed to another roundabout in the three year period. The bus station were situated in eastern side far from the Ring road in 2007 but in 2010 bus station changed and were attached to two major roundabout of Hospital Rd.

Furthermore, the car park facility for the public and staff were in same place attached to the right side of Hospital Rd but later in 2010 the parking for public were separated and moved near to city hospital. Comparing and contrasting road access were more effective in 2010.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have successfully identified the main features of the maps, such as the addition of roundabouts and the relocation of the bus station and car parks. You provided a clear overview and supported your points with comparisons between 2007 and 2010. However, there are some inaccuracies in your description; for instance, you mention three roundabouts, but the map shows two roundabouts and a bus station that was replaced by a roundabout. Additionally, the statement that the bus station was 'far from the Ring road' is not entirely supported by the visual evidence. To reach a higher band, ensure your reporting of spatial details is more precise and avoid over-generalizing features that are clearly labeled on the map.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs detailing the changes. You use cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'Moreover', 'In the map of 2007', and 'Furthermore' to guide the reader. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. For example, the transition between the description of the roundabouts and the bus station in the third paragraph is slightly repetitive. The use of referencing is generally clear, but some sentences feel disjointed due to grammatical errors, which slightly impacts the overall cohesion of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to describe the changes, using terms like 'revolutionized', 'substantial change', 'shifted', and 'transformed'. However, there are several spelling errors ('demostrate', 'hopital', 'rounabout', 'sounthern') and some imprecise word choices, such as 'revolutionized', which is too strong for simple road modifications. You also struggle with collocations, such as 'roads... were accessed to hospital'. To improve, focus on using more precise geographical and descriptive vocabulary and ensure you proofread for basic spelling errors, which currently limit your ability to convey information with the necessary precision for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'there only simple roads... were accessed to hospital' and 'the bus station were situated'. Subject-verb agreement is a recurring issue, as is the misuse of passive voice. While your meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the text from reaching a higher band. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, as well as refining your use of articles and prepositions.

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