Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The maps illustrate the layout of a city hospital in 2007 and how it changed in 2010.
Overall, the city hospital was significantly developed in 2010. In major changes, a joint car park including staff and public was separated, a bus station introduced, bus stops were removed, and two roundabout were established in 2010.
In detail, in 2007. in the south, by entering in the city hospital, there was a city road in right side. Furthermore, there was a hospital road in middle of the city hospital surrounded by bus stops in the left and right sides. In the east side of hospital road, there was a joint car park for staff and public. Next to the hospital road, there was a rectangular shaped city hospital surrounded by ring road.
In 2010, two roundabout were built, one at the entrance before the hospital road and another after the hospital road. Bus stops in the left and right sides of hospital road were removed in 2010 and a bus station was added in the left side of
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the maps, such as the introduction of roundabouts, the bus station, and the separation of the car park. However, the response is incomplete, as it ends abruptly mid-sentence, failing to finish the description of the 2010 changes. While the overview is clear, the lack of completion prevents a full analysis of the data. The comparison between the two years is attempted, but the sudden termination significantly impacts the overall task achievement, as the final details are missing.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. There is a logical attempt to sequence the information chronologically. However, the abrupt ending disrupts the flow and coherence of the final section. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'In detail' and 'Furthermore', but they are sometimes used mechanically. The paragraphing is appropriate for the task, but the lack of a concluding sentence or a completed final paragraph limits the overall cohesion of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, using terms like 'layout', 'significantly developed', and 'rectangular shaped'. However, there are instances of awkward phrasing and word choice, such as 'by entering in the city hospital' and 'in middle of the city hospital'. The range is somewhat limited, and there is a reliance on basic descriptive language. To reach a higher band, you should aim for more precise collocations and a wider variety of vocabulary to describe spatial changes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains several grammatical errors that affect the clarity of the writing. There are consistent issues with pluralisation, such as 'two roundabout' instead of 'two roundabouts', and 'bus stops in the left and right sides'. Preposition usage is also inconsistent, for example, 'in right side' instead of 'on the right side'. While there is an attempt at complex sentence structures, the frequency of these errors is noticeable. The incomplete final sentence also leaves a grammatical fragment, which detracts from the overall accuracy.
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