Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given maps illustrate road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Overall, there is no change in the area of hospital but the roads that are used to access the hospital is more facilitated by adding the different parking areas according to categories.
In 2007, by city road visitor reach a point where four roads are conjected by taking turn to the north side, city hospital located after travelling to the hospital road. Hopital road had only the six spots were available for bus stops and a signal sector allocated for parking used by both staff and public, which is presented at the east side of dospital road.
By 2013, by traveling to city road first we access the round about and in the north side the at teh end of hospital another roundabout is added. A proper bus station is build in the west of hospital road and two paths contected to it from both rounabouts. The previous parking is allocated for just staff cars. In addition, for public car park another area is choosen we can reach it after accessing the roundabout that is situated beside the hospital, by following the east road and by passing the gate of staff car park turn to the opposite side of it, then on the east side the gate connecting to the public parking.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the maps, such as the addition of roundabouts, the new bus station, and the separation of parking facilities. However, the description of the layout is often confusing and lacks precision. For instance, the phrase 'four roads are conjected' is unclear, and the explanation of the parking access in the second paragraph is overly wordy and difficult to follow. While the main trends are identified, the lack of clarity in describing the spatial relationships prevents a higher score. The response would benefit from more concise, objective reporting of the changes rather than a narrative-style description of how to navigate the roads.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. However, the progression of ideas within the body paragraphs is often disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or misused, such as 'by traveling to city road first we access the round about'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to visualize the changes. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the internal flow is hampered by awkward phrasing and a lack of logical signposting between the different features of the map.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains several inaccuracies that impede clarity. Words like 'conjected' (likely meant 'congested' or 'converged') and 'facilitated' are used incorrectly in context. There is also a reliance on basic descriptive language, such as 'reach a point' or 'area is choosen'. While the student manages to convey the basic meaning, the lack of precise terminology for map description (e.g., 'intersect', 'adjacent to', 'relocated') limits the score. Spelling errors like 'dospital' and 'contected' also detract from the overall quality.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include incorrect verb tenses ('is build', 'is choosen'), missing articles, and awkward sentence construction ('by city road visitor reach a point'). These errors are frequent and sometimes make the meaning difficult to grasp. While the student attempts to use complex sentences, the lack of control over basic grammar and punctuation prevents the response from reaching a higher band. The writing would benefit from a focus on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage.
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