Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The two maps illustrate to city hospital in 2007 and than 2010. it show this how change in three years in city hospital. so i will comparing this map.
first, in 2007 in city hospital does not modern. but in 2010 it was modern and increase development. first look at this map for car parking and staff parking were one ground provide but in 2010 public car park and staff car park was seprate this.
second bus stop was near the public car park but in 2010 in bus stop park was west and south corner.
third i 2007 in not modern because there were not ring road circle. and than in 2010 in two ring road and add in hospital road. and it was very increase modern development. there were very big hospital before hospital.
in conclude, modern hospital was very big than before so it was very development than before. old hospital was small and parking era was small so it was small than 2010 city hospital.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the main features of the maps, such as the changes to parking and the addition of the ring road. However, the description is often vague and lacks precision. For example, the mention of 'two ring road' is inaccurate as the map shows a single ring road system. The analysis of the bus stops and parking areas is present but lacks the necessary detail to fully convey the changes. The response relies on subjective descriptions like 'modern' rather than objective reporting of the physical changes. To improve, focus on accurately describing the location and nature of the changes using precise geographical language.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'first', 'second', and 'third'. The flow between sentences is frequently interrupted by grammatical errors, making the progression of ideas feel disjointed. Referencing is sometimes unclear, for instance, in the phrase 'in bus stop park was west and south corner', which makes it difficult to follow the spatial relationships. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one would significantly enhance the coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic words like 'big', 'small', and 'modern'. There are several instances of incorrect word choice and collocation, such as 'increase development' and 'parking era' (likely meant 'area'). The student struggles to use precise terminology to describe the map features, such as 'ring road circle' or 'add in hospital road'. To achieve a higher band, you should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to maps and urban planning, such as 'constructed', 'relocated', 'expanded', and 'junctions', and work on using these words in their correct context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with verb tense (e.g., 'does not modern'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack necessary articles and prepositions, such as 'in two ring road and add in hospital road'. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including the correct use of 'there is/are', past tense verbs for describing historical data, and ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb.
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