Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The two maps shown here show the change during the period of 3 years between 2007 and 2010 of the City Hospital surrounding area, to sum up the 2007 map of the hospital we see that a ring road goes around the hospital and the hospital is connected to the city road via a single hospital road which has six both stops 3 on each side as indicated by the index, while the car parks access is on the ring road, but if you take into account left hand driving you have to circle the entire Ring Road to actually reach the car park, while the bus stops on either side of a narrow hospital road will inevitably lead to traffic congestion on the hospital road, and because of which a pile up might stretch to the city road. In the 2010 map however we see that the entrance to the city hospital via the city road has been remodeled and a roundabout has been put into place, in total we see two additional roundabouts and a separate bus station removing the chances of a pile up on the hospital road while the ring road also now connects with the hospital road via a roundabout. Finally the Public car park has been built separate to the staff car park reducing the congestion.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the maps well, identifying the key changes such as the introduction of roundabouts, the new bus station, and the separation of car parks. However, the response is written as a single, long paragraph, which hinders the clear presentation of information. While the comparison between 2007 and 2010 is present, the analysis occasionally drifts into speculation (e.g., 'inevitably lead to traffic congestion' and 'a pile up might stretch'), which is not explicitly stated in the data. To reach a higher band, the focus should remain strictly on reporting the visual information provided in the maps rather than inferring potential traffic consequences.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response lacks paragraphing, which is a significant weakness for an Academic Task 1 report. A clear structure—typically an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs—is essential for logical progression. While there are some cohesive devices used, such as 'while', 'however', and 'finally', the flow is hampered by the lack of sentence variety and the absence of clear paragraph breaks. The ideas are generally linked, but the overall organization is mechanical and lacks the sophisticated structure required for higher bands.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, with terms like 'remodeled', 'congestion', and 'indicated' used correctly. However, there is a reliance on repetitive phrasing and some imprecise word choices, such as 'pile up' and 'six both stops'. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, and the response would benefit from more precise terminology related to map descriptions, such as 'junction', 'access point', or 'redesigned'. The lexical control is sufficient to convey the main points but lacks the flexibility and precision expected at higher levels.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors and punctuation issues. For example, the opening sentence is a long, run-on sentence that lacks proper punctuation. There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and preposition usage (e.g., 'the 2007 map of the hospital we see that...'). While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in sentence construction and punctuation prevents the response from reaching a higher band. More attention to sentence boundaries and grammatical accuracy is needed.

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