Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
THE TWO MAPS BELOW SHOW ROAD ACCESS TO A CITY HOSPITAL IN 2007 AND 2010 .
BY TAKING A GENERAL OVERVIEW IT SEEN THAT THERE ARE SHOW ROAD ACCESS A CITYU HOSPITAL LIKE BUS STOP YET ROUNDABOUT REMAIN SAME
ON ANALYSING IN THE YEAR 2007 RING ROAD LOCATED AT NORTH SIDE IN THE NEXT EAST SIDE LOCATDED AT BUS STOP AND CAR PARK STAFF AND PUBLIC .IN THE SOUTH SIDE LOCATED CITY ROAD AND HOSPITAL RD .IN THE WEST SIDE LOCATED CITY HOSPITAL
PROBING FURTHER IN THE EAST SIED ESTABLISHED ROUNDABOUT . IN THE RING ROAD AND HOS[PITAL IS SAME . CAR PARK STAFF AND PUBLIC TRANSFORMED EAST SIDE PUBLIC CAR PARK AND SOUTH SIDE STAFF CAR PARK . HOSPITAL RD IN THE SAME LOCATED AT SOUTH SIDE . BUS STOP CHANGE TO EAST TO WEST SIDE MODIFIED BUS STATION .CITY HOSPITAL IS A SAME LOCTED BY NORTH SIDE .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to describe the changes between the two maps, but it fails to provide a clear or accurate summary. The description of the locations is confusing and often factually incorrect based on the provided images (e.g., stating the hospital is on the north side in both years when the maps show it remains in the same location, but the surrounding infrastructure changes significantly). The main features, such as the new roundabout and the relocation of car parks, are mentioned but not clearly explained or contrasted. The response lacks a coherent overview of the major trends, making it difficult for the reader to follow the development of the hospital access over the three-year period.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay is poorly organized, with disjointed sentences that do not flow logically. Paragraphing is present but does not serve to group related information effectively. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas; instead, the text relies on repetitive sentence structures like 'In the [direction] side located...'. The referencing is often unclear, making it difficult to track which map or which specific change is being discussed. The overall progression of information is fragmented, which hinders the reader's ability to understand the comparison between 2007 and 2010.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, consisting mostly of basic directional terms and nouns taken directly from the prompt. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'it seen that there are show road access' and 'hospital is a same locted'. The student struggles to use precise terminology to describe the changes, such as 'transformed' or 'modified', which are used incorrectly in context. The lack of variety and the persistent errors in basic terminology significantly restrict the ability to convey information accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting almost entirely of simple, fragmented sentences. There are frequent and severe errors in sentence construction, verb tense, and word order, such as 'In the next east side locatded at bus stop' and 'bus stop change to east to west side'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with erratic capitalization and missing articles throughout the text. These errors are pervasive and frequently impede communication, making the meaning difficult to decipher in several places.
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