Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The diagram illustrate the two mape below devote road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. As we show in this diagram we have two different project between that time.

Conversely, the first map of city hospital show that near ring road behind city hospital and after hospital we show strait road is this a hospital road and near hospital road east side we show car park for staff and public and after the hospital road we show the car parking east side has bus stop.

The second map we show some quite changes in 2010 the city hospital as usual on that same place but the car parking is near city hospital east side and when walk straight forward we show bus station is west side of the hospital road and staff parking is east side off hospital road hear we show it has two different parking like public parking and staff parking and after hospital roads left side big roundabout so last 3 year the hospital area industrialisation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to describe the changes between the two maps, but it fails to provide a clear overview or highlight the most significant trends. The description is often confusing and lacks precision, such as the vague reference to 'some quite changes' or the inaccurate claim that the area underwent 'industrialisation'. While the main features like the car parks and bus stops are mentioned, the lack of a clear summary and the inclusion of inaccurate information prevent the response from fully addressing the task requirements. The report is descriptive rather than analytical, missing the opportunity to compare the two time periods effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often unclear. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inappropriate, such as the use of 'Conversely' at the start of the second paragraph, which does not logically connect the ideas. Referencing is frequently confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial layout of the hospital area. The sentences are often disjointed, and the lack of clear signposting makes the overall structure feel mechanical and difficult to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'strait road' instead of 'straight road', and 'hear we show' instead of 'here we show'. The student struggles to use precise terminology to describe map features, relying on basic phrases like 'we show' or 'as usual'. The spelling errors, such as 'mape' and 'industrialisation' (used incorrectly in context), further limit the clarity of the response. A wider range of vocabulary related to spatial description is needed to improve the score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement ('The diagram illustrate'), article usage, and prepositional phrases. Many sentences are poorly constructed, making them difficult to parse, such as 'after hospital we show strait road is this a hospital road'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with run-on sentences and missing commas. While the meaning is generally discernible, the high frequency of basic grammatical errors significantly impacts the readability of the text.

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