Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The combination of two maps illustrates the comparison of the road access to a city hospital in 2007 with 2010.

Considering from an overall perspective, it can be apparently observed that the Plan has undergo significant changes like addition of some places such as Public car park, roundabout and bus station along with renovation some places.

To begin with, In 2007, there was an bus stop in the east corner which was than renovated by making a Bus station near the hospital road in 2010. Additionally, After removing the trees from the hospital road, the staff and public car park has been reinstall by giving personalize car parking for staff only in the middle east corner of hospital road and opposite to bus station in 2010.

Furthermore, the hospital road has also been redeveloped by making 2 roundabout circles, among them one connecting to ring road and other to city road for making transportation convenient for people. Moreover, after separating public car park with staff, the car park for public has been reallocated in the east corner of City hospital, which is access through ring road. Noticeably, in the south-east corner there has been install a circular road junction.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main features of the maps, including the addition of the roundabout, the bus station, and the changes to the car parks. You provided a clear overview and made relevant comparisons between 2007 and 2010. However, the description of the locations is occasionally imprecise (e.g., 'middle east corner'), which makes it slightly difficult for the reader to visualize the exact changes. To reach a higher band, ensure that spatial descriptions are more accurate and that all major changes are clearly linked to their specific locations on the map.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on specific aspects of the map changes. You used cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Additionally', and 'Furthermore' to guide the reader through the information. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'among them one connecting to ring road and other to city road'. Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring that pronouns or references clearly point to their antecedents would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe the changes, using terms like 'renovated', 'redeveloped', and 'reallocated'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'has undergo' (should be 'has undergone'), 'has been reinstall' (should be 'has been reinstalled'), and 'there has been install' (should be 'there has been installed'). These errors indicate a lack of precision in verb forms and word endings. Focusing on accurate verb tenses and collocations related to map descriptions will help you achieve a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempted a variety of sentence structures, including complex sentences. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses and passive voice constructions. For example, 'the staff and public car park has been reinstall' contains both a subject-verb agreement error and an incorrect verb form. Additionally, 'there was an bus stop' should be 'there was a bus stop'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. You should focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and consistent use of the passive voice for describing changes.

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