Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The modification of city hospital is illustrated by the given map graph in the year 2007 and 2010.
Overall, interestingly; the bus stop was relocated from east to west of the city hospital and connected with the ring road . However.most of the things constructed later roundbout is one of them.
The some change can be seen in the ring road it open later from the east side in order to make the public park. Moreover, there is two ring road can be seen in the map 2010, which connects the road to each other with the amenities and hospital road remained unchanged expect the trees removed from there.
Furthermore, staff park and public park which can be seen in 2007 it was together and separated in 2010 and size of staff car parking is narrow than the public staff parking beside the hospital road. The roundbout was built in the year 2010, which is separated from the all amenities in the east side.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response identifies the main changes, such as the relocation of the bus stop and the addition of roundabouts and road modifications. However, the description is often unclear and lacks precision. For instance, the statement 'there is two ring road can be seen' is inaccurate, as the map shows a single ring road with new access points. The report fails to clearly distinguish between the 2007 and 2010 layouts, and the description of the parking areas is confusing. To reach a higher band, you must ensure that the data reported is factually accurate based on the visual evidence and that the main features are highlighted with greater clarity and logical grouping.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression of ideas is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and punctuation errors. For example, the sentence 'However.most of the things constructed later roundbout is one of them' is fragmented and difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Moreover' and 'Furthermore', but they are often applied in a way that does not effectively link the ideas. The referencing is also unclear, particularly when referring to the maps, which makes it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial changes being described.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often imprecise. You rely on basic terms like 'things' and 'change', which do not demonstrate the range required for a higher band. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'map graph' (which is redundant) and 'narrow than' (which should be 'narrower than'). Some attempts at more specific vocabulary, such as 'amenities' and 'relocated', are present, but they are not used with enough consistency or accuracy to elevate the score. You should focus on using more precise terminology related to maps and spatial descriptions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'there is two ring road' and 'trees removed from there'. Punctuation is also problematic, with periods used incorrectly within sentences, such as 'However.most'. The sentence structures are generally simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'The roundbout was built in the year 2010, which is separated from the all amenities in the east side.' You need to focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and correct punctuation to improve clarity.
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