Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The maps illustrates road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
There is huge difference in both maps. In 2007 the roads toward the city hospital were simple as compared to 2010
In 2007 there was no public car park attached to the east side of city hospital. But in 2010 there was a car park for the car parking. There was also the roundabout for the smooth flow of traffic in the south part of the hospital. On the other end in 2007 There was no bus station on the west side of the hospital road as compared to 2010 map. Also in 2010 there was also the roundabout in south side of the hospital which was connected to the city road and the bus station. In 2007 there was also the bus stop but it was not organized it was present on the hospital road as compared to 2010
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the maps, such as the addition of the car park, the bus station, and the roundabouts. However, the description is somewhat repetitive and lacks a clear overview or summary of the overall trends. The comparison between the two years is present but could be more effectively structured to highlight the transformation of the hospital's infrastructure. While the key changes are identified, the lack of a distinct introduction and a cohesive summary paragraph limits the development of the response. To improve, ensure you group information logically rather than listing changes in a disjointed manner.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into a single paragraph, which makes it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. There is a lack of effective paragraphing to separate the introduction from the body. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often repetitive (e.g., 'In 2007', 'In 2010') and sometimes mechanical. The flow between sentences is occasionally interrupted by awkward phrasing, such as 'On the other end in 2007', which does not accurately signal a transition. Using a wider variety of linking words and organizing the response into clear paragraphs would significantly improve the coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'huge difference', 'simple', and 'car parking' are basic and lack the precision required for a higher band. There is also some awkward phrasing, such as 'not organized it was present', which hinders clarity. To achieve a higher score, you should aim to use more precise terminology related to maps and urban planning, such as 'infrastructure', 'accessibility', 'constructed', or 'relocated'. Expanding your range of descriptive adjectives and nouns will help you convey the changes more effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempts at complex sentences, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Subject-verb agreement issues are present, such as 'The maps illustrates' and 'There was also the roundabout'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and periods. While the meaning is generally clear, these errors occur frequently and occasionally impede the flow of reading. Focusing on basic sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and correct article usage will help improve the accuracy of your writing.
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