Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The two maps illustrates new road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Overall, some places added during added new road, while some places are combined and replace with one place. Two circles added between city hospital and road.

In 2007, city hospital had car park, which used by staff and public both. City hospital and cross road between many bus stops available. Before renovation, city hospital had not any circle nearby roads.

In 2010, city hospital had a car park, which is now allowed for only staff members. Nearby city hospital, public car park added. Many bus stops removed and constructed only one, which was joint with two circle. Two circles added, one joint with city hospital gate and second joint with four cross road. Before city hospital had two gates but after renovated one another gate added for public car park. Ring road were remained same over the time. City hospital, bus station and staff car parking connected with each other by road.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the maps, such as the changes to car parking and the introduction of roundabouts. However, the description is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear, analytical overview. While you mention that 'some places added' and 'some places are combined', this is vague. To improve, you should explicitly highlight the most significant changes, such as the shift from a shared car park to separate staff and public facilities, and the reorganization of the bus station. The report is functional but lacks the precision required for a higher band, as some details are described in a way that is difficult to follow.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes repetitive. Phrases like 'In 2007' and 'In 2010' are used to signal time, but the internal flow within paragraphs is often choppy. For example, the sentence 'Two circles added between city hospital and road' lacks a proper transition or clear reference to the previous information. Improving the use of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in contrast') would help create a smoother progression of ideas between sentences.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. You rely heavily on simple verbs like 'added', 'removed', and 'constructed'. There is also some awkward phrasing, such as 'joint with two circle' and 'cross road between many bus stops'. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise terminology for describing map changes, such as 'converted', 'relocated', 'expanded', or 'integrated'. Additionally, ensure that you use nouns and adjectives correctly to describe the infrastructure changes more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, particularly regarding articles ('the' is often missing) and verb forms. For instance, 'The two maps illustrates' should be 'illustrate', and 'city hospital had not any circle' is grammatically incorrect. You rely mostly on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'which is now allowed for only staff members'. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, the correct use of articles, and ensuring that your sentence structures are grammatically sound.

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