Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The two map illustrated the pathway of a city hospital between 2007 and 2010 .
Overall , there were many changes between two years . Ring road was at the same place in both years , it was suited in northern part of the hospital. The main changes was about a roundabout there were three roundabout in 2007 .
Public car parks established in city hospital in 2010 , a roundabout was built in 2010 . Car park was replaced by the staff car park and at the western side there was a bus stand , there were two roundabout near the hospital road and Bus stand have two entrances , in 2007 at the east side there was a bus stop and. Now it was replaced . The city road was at the same place at the southern side . There were many technology in moderate hospital . There was a special car parks for the employment and for public .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the maps, such as the addition of car parks and the changes to roundabouts. However, the description is somewhat disorganized and lacks a clear, analytical focus. While you identify key changes, the reporting is occasionally confusing, such as the contradictory mention of roundabouts. To improve, ensure you clearly contrast the 2007 and 2010 layouts by grouping features logically (e.g., road access vs. parking facilities) rather than listing them in a fragmented manner. The overview is present but could be more precise in summarizing the overall transformation of the hospital's infrastructure.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal flow is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical or misused, such as the abrupt transition 'Now it was replaced'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to track which year or location is being discussed. To achieve a higher band, focus on using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'In contrast', 'Furthermore', 'Subsequently') to connect ideas more fluidly and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'many technology in moderate hospital' and 'for the employment', which are not appropriate in this context. You rely on basic descriptors and struggle with accurate collocations related to map descriptions. To improve, learn specific terminology for describing changes in maps, such as 'demolished', 'expanded', 'converted', or 'relocated', and ensure you use nouns and adjectives correctly to describe the hospital facilities.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The two map illustrated'), tense consistency (switching between past and present), and article usage. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences are often marred by errors in punctuation and syntax. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring consistent verb tenses when describing past events, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles or incorrect pluralization.
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