Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

the two maps illustrate the layout of city hospital in 2007 and the proposed changes to be made by 2010.

Overall it can be seen that, the city hospital is set to undergo significant redevelopment, with new facilities added and existing features upgraded to enhance city hospital experience.

To begin with, in 2007, the city hospital has a simple layout with a ring road in the northern past. However on the south aera there was big bus stop. car park, staff and public was located a eastern side, the central aera was an closed, and there were two entrances on the north and south, both connected to the main road.

on the other hand, several changes are expected to transform the city hospital. bus stop will be replaced with an public car park. in addition in 2010 on south side in the middle both the end connected to the two different ways and both are joining to the bus stop. hence added a two big round on both side. finally all the changes are done on it in city hospital.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the maps, such as the changes to the bus stop and the addition of roundabouts. However, the description of the 2010 layout is confusing and lacks precision. For example, the phrase 'in the middle both the end connected to the two different ways' is unclear and fails to accurately describe the new road infrastructure. While the overview identifies that redevelopment is occurring, the lack of clarity in reporting specific spatial changes prevents a higher score. The response would benefit from more precise terminology regarding the road layout and a clearer distinction between the two time periods.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'To begin with' and 'on the other hand' are used, but the internal flow within paragraphs is disjointed. The referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly in the final paragraph where 'all the changes are done on it' is vague. The progression of ideas is hindered by grammatical errors that make it difficult to follow the spatial relationships between the hospital features.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'northern past' (likely meant 'part') and 'a eastern side' (should be 'the eastern side'). The student relies on basic descriptors like 'simple layout' and 'big round', which lack the precision required for describing maps. There is little evidence of less common lexical items or an awareness of collocation. To improve, the student should focus on using more specific vocabulary related to urban planning and infrastructure, such as 'junctions', 'access points', or 'reconfigured'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with articles ('a eastern side', 'an closed'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper punctuation, such as 'car park, staff and public was located a eastern side'. The range of structures is limited to simple sentences, and attempts at more complex descriptions result in awkward phrasing that is difficult to parse. Significant focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading for articles and prepositions is required.

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