Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The image depicts the modifications and destination of places around the city hospital. It also illustrates the comparison from 2007 to 2010.
Overall, it is observed that bus stop which is located both side of hospital road across the ring road shifted to south-west joined by hospital road by both ends which make people more ease to reach hospital who came from bus. Parking replaced to east of hospital by separating public and staff car parking which help to get rid more traffic.
Furthermore, the roundabout changed from east to south one between ring road and one on city road. These all changes helped people economically and made more betterment to reach city hospital. For improving the city livelihood, these changes are necessary because without having a clear structure any city cannot be able to developed.
Hence, by concluding from the image that all differences between certain years were necessity of city development and moving towards of becoming a better society by both aspects economically and humanity.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response identifies the main features, such as the relocation of the bus stops and the separation of parking facilities. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. The description of the roundabout changes is unclear, and the response includes irrelevant commentary about 'economic betterment' and 'city livelihood,' which is not required for an Academic Task 1 report. An IELTS report should remain objective and focus strictly on the data presented in the diagrams rather than speculating on the social or economic necessity of the changes.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the flow between ideas is sometimes mechanical. The use of cohesive devices is limited, and some sentences are disjointed, particularly in the second paragraph where the transition from describing the parking to the roundabout is abrupt. The concluding paragraph introduces subjective opinions rather than summarizing the visual data, which disrupts the logical progression expected in a formal report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate to convey the basic meaning, but it lacks the precision required for a higher band. Phrases like 'make people more ease' and 'get rid more traffic' are unnatural and imprecise. There is a reliance on simple, repetitive language. To improve, you should use more specific terminology related to urban planning, such as 'relocated,' 'designated,' 'segregated,' or 'infrastructure,' and ensure that collocations are accurate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For example, 'bus stop which is located both side of hospital road' lacks proper articles and pluralization. There are also issues with word order and preposition usage, such as 'moved towards of becoming.' While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band level.
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