Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the given dual map illustrates the the basic layout of city hospital in 2007 and 2010 years

overall, after proper scanning it is quite evident the city hospital had underwent several changes . As the city hospital is become more modrenized and commercialized

To begin ,in south-east direction there is a car parking :staff and public in 2007 year but in 2010 year they were demolished from that place and placed on east direction near the city hospital. whereas in center there are a lot of bus stand in 2007 year but in 2010 year the bus stand was totally removed and on that place they made the bus stand in south-west direction and staff car parking in north-east direction

however, in south direction they were make the roundabout in 2010 year nearby the city hospital. furthermore, in south direction they also make the roundabout

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you identify the main changes, such as the relocation of the bus station and car parks, the description lacks precision. For example, you mention the bus station was 'totally removed' and 'made' in the south-west, but you do not clearly describe the road access changes (the new roundabout and the three access roads). The overview is also quite vague, failing to highlight the most significant transformations. To improve, ensure you cover all key features shown in the maps and provide a more detailed summary of the spatial changes.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow is disjointed. You use some cohesive devices like 'To begin' and 'however', but they are often used incorrectly or in a way that does not logically connect the ideas. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as 'they were demolished', where the subject 'they' is ambiguous. The progression of information is repetitive, particularly in the final paragraph where you mention the roundabout twice. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear focus would significantly enhance the readability and logical structure of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You rely on basic verbs like 'made' and 'placed' throughout the response. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'proper scanning' and 'the city hospital is become more modrenized'. The spelling of 'modrenized' is incorrect. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary related to maps and changes, such as 'relocated', 'constructed', 'demolished', or 'extended'. Expanding your range of descriptive language will help you report the information more effectively and professionally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. You struggle with verb tenses and subject-verb agreement, such as 'the city hospital had underwent' (should be 'had undergone') and 'they were make' (should be 'they made'). Sentence structures are generally simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and incorrect capitalization. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct tense usage, and practicing the use of complex structures like relative clauses or passive voice, which are essential for describing map changes.

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