Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The provided maps illustrate the development of road access to a city hospital from 2007 to 2010.
Overall, the road access moderanside and the additionin the middle of roundabout bus stattion and staff car parking area and the station and staff car parking was separated from east side to recreation inside or wst side of hospital.
Looking at the details, in 2007 tthe staff car and public car and the staff car is divided . the staff car park was nchanged and the public car was constructed to the east side of hospital. While the west side of buust stop road was connected to city road and the other side rooad was atttacheed to ciiity hospitale and the hospital road was also straightforward connect to hospital rounoabo and ppose cnnecon was another rndabout attached to city road.Howeover the inside of public parking was removed and bus station was connected double side road.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to describe the changes between the two maps, but the information is presented in a confusing and often inaccurate manner. While you identify some features like the roundabout and car parks, the description of their locations and the changes over time is difficult to follow. The overview is weak and does not clearly highlight the main trends, such as the expansion of road access and the relocation of facilities. To improve, focus on grouping information logically—for example, describing the road network changes separately from the facility relocations—and ensure that your descriptions of spatial relationships are precise and based clearly on the provided visual data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a clear logical progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the sentences within the paragraphs are disjointed and often repetitive, such as the repeated mention of the staff car park. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, making it difficult for the reader to follow the sequence of events. The transition between the 2007 and 2010 data is not clearly marked, which is essential for a task comparing two points in time. Using clearer signposting language (e.g., 'In contrast,' 'Subsequently,' 'Furthermore') would significantly improve the flow and readability of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, with several spelling errors (e.g., 'moderanside', 'wst', 'buust', 'rndabout', 'ppose'). You rely on basic terms and struggle to describe the features of the maps accurately. There is a lack of precise terminology related to maps and urban planning, such as 'intersection,' 'relocated,' 'adjacent to,' or 'infrastructure.' To reach a higher band, you need to expand your range of vocabulary and ensure that you are using words correctly in context. Proofreading for spelling and word choice is essential, as the current errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding of the intended meaning.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often obscure the meaning. There are issues with sentence structure, such as run-on sentences and fragments, as well as errors in subject-verb agreement and preposition usage (e.g., 'the staff car is divided', 'straightforward connect to hospital rounoabo'). The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, poorly constructed sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensuring that your verbs and nouns agree. Practice using complex sentences with subordinating conjunctions to add variety, but ensure they are grammatically sound before attempting more advanced structures.
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