Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
ON THIS GIVEN MAPS IT'S ILLSURATE THAT THE ROAD ACESS OF BETWEEN 2007 AND 2010 YEAR WHERE IT INCLUDES A FEATURES AND AVAILABILITY OF SOURCES THERE .
OVERALL,WE CAN CLEARLY SAW THAT THE NEW STRUCTURES HAS BEEN BUILT ON THE 2010 AS COMPARED TO 2007.ON THE OTHER HAND WE CAN SAW A BUS STATION AND SOME WELL DESIGNED ROAD .
AFTER ANALYZING THE MAP WE CAN CLEARLY SAW THAT THE THERE WAS A SMALL INFRASTRUCTURE AS ON 2007 .IT ALSO HAPPENS DUE TO THE STARTING TIME WHERE MORE THINGS ARE PLANNING TO BUILT ON THE NEXT FUTURE .CONTINUOSLY THE ROAD IS ABOUT TOO SMALL ON 2007.
ON THE 2010 CITY HOSPITAL MAPS WE CAN CLEARLY LOOK AT THE NEW BIG BUS STATION WHICH WAS BUILT AND PUBLIC CAR PARK WAS SO BIG .SIMILARLY WE CAN CATCH THE STAFF CAR PARK AND ROUNDABOUT WITH BIG RINGROAD TYPE ROAD WITH THE ALL OF THESE 2010 CITY HOSPITAL LOOKS SO PERFECT .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to describe the changes between the two maps, but it fails to provide a clear, accurate summary of the main features. While it mentions the bus station and car parks, the descriptions are vague and lack precise detail regarding the location of these features (e.g., the hospital road, the roundabout, or the specific access points). The overview is weak and does not effectively highlight the significant changes, such as the addition of the ring road. The response relies on subjective commentary like 'looks so perfect' rather than objective reporting of the visual data, which is essential for an Academic Task 1 response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression of ideas is weak. The transition between sentences is often abrupt, and the use of cohesive devices is mechanical or misused (e.g., 'CONTINUOSLY' used as a transition). The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between 2007 and 2010. The overall structure lacks the necessary flow to present a coherent comparison of the two maps.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic verbs like 'saw' and 'built' throughout the text. There are significant issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'ROAD ACESS OF BETWEEN' and 'RINGROAD TYPE ROAD'. The language used is informal and lacks the precision required for an academic report. The spelling of 'ILLSURATE' (illustrate) and 'CONTINUOSLY' (continuously) further detracts from the quality of the writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'NEW STRUCTURES HAS BEEN BUILT', 'ROAD IS ABOUT TOO SMALL'), incorrect article usage, and awkward sentence construction. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and incorrect capitalization throughout the text. These errors are pervasive and significantly affect the clarity of the message.
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