Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In the maps below we can see how road access to a city hospital in 2027 and 2010. at first we can see the overall map is based on the surrounding of the city hospital. in the past three years there are several changes has been done in that area. the main major changes which we can notices is the separation of the car parking area. due to less space it was tough to manage for them to address all the cars of the staffs and the public they decided to shift the area for the public parking space at the east side of the city hospital which is linked with the ring road. another major change made in those three years is that they shift the bus stop area from the far east side to west side of the hospital road, so the buses can use the city road and make the process more convenient. also they added a roundabout at the far east side of the staff car park. so the overall changes made in the past three years is to make the transportation more easy and convenient for the people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the maps, such as the relocation of the car park and bus stop, and the addition of a roundabout. However, the response is presented as a single block of text, which hinders the clear presentation of information. While the key changes are identified, the analysis lacks a clear overview or summary paragraph, which is essential for a high band score in Task 1. The description of the changes is generally accurate, but the lack of formal structure makes it difficult to follow the progression of the comparison between 2007 and 2010.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response lacks paragraphing entirely, which is a significant weakness. The ideas are presented in a single, dense block, making it difficult for the reader to navigate the information. While there is some attempt at logical sequencing, the lack of clear paragraph breaks and the limited use of cohesive devices (e.g., 'at first', 'also') make the flow feel mechanical and repetitive. To improve, you should separate your introduction, overview, and specific details into distinct paragraphs and use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'major changes', 'city hospital', and 'area' are used frequently. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'manage for them to address all the cars'. To achieve a higher band, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary related to maps and urban planning, such as 'relocated', 'constructed', 'extended', or 'facilitate'. The range of vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the main points, but it lacks the sophistication required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, particularly with verb tenses and subject-verb agreement. For example, 'there are several changes has been done' should be 'several changes have been made', and 'they shift the bus stop' should be 'they shifted the bus stop'. Additionally, the sentence structure is often repetitive, relying heavily on simple sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with many sentences starting with lowercase letters. Improving your control over past tense forms and ensuring consistent sentence structure will significantly enhance your score.

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