Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The map illustrates the road access to a city hospital between 2007 and 2010.
Overall, it is clear that the area became more development and modernized. In addition,a roundabout was introduced while bus stop was removed.
Looking at the details, in 2007 there was a bus stop in the eastern place of hospital. This map show 2007 in hospital building there are build in very simple only one bus stop in eastern side while car park staff and public build in southern side. There are not good facilities modern development structure in 2007.
In comparison, the ring road, city hospital, hospital road and city road remained unchanged, while the eastern area and southern area was developed and modernized structure in hospital. The hospital structure in 2010 show different changes in there building. There was build different car parking public car park are Eastern place and staff car park are build in southern side. By 2010 the park had been replaced by roundabout.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the maps, such as the introduction of the roundabout and the changes to car parking. However, the description is somewhat repetitive and lacks precision in spatial referencing. For instance, describing the bus stop as being in the 'eastern place' is vague. While the main trends are identified, the comparison between the two years could be more effectively integrated rather than listing features separately. The overview is present but could be more analytical regarding the overall layout changes. To reach a higher band, ensure that all key features are clearly highlighted and compared with greater accuracy.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate, such as the transition 'In addition,a roundabout was introduced while bus stop was removed.' The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to track which specific area is being discussed. While there is an overall progression, the flow between sentences is occasionally disjointed. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring clear pronoun referencing would enhance the logical flow of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and incorrect word choices, such as 'became more development' instead of 'developed' and 'eastern place of hospital' instead of 'eastern side of the hospital'. The repetition of words like 'build' and 'structure' limits the lexical variety. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and varied terminology to describe changes, such as 'transformed', 'relocated', or 'expanded'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'This map show 2007 in hospital building there are build in very simple' and 'the eastern area and southern area was developed'. Subject-verb agreement and tense consistency are problematic throughout the text. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct verb forms will significantly improve the quality of the writing.
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