Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The diagrams given below displays the road access to a city hospital in years 2007 and 2010.
Overall, the structure of map has been drastically changed since 2007 and has gone through several developments like adding public car parking area, installed roundabouts for efficient traffic control, removed bus stops and etc.
Since 2007, the location of city hospital is unchanged but numerous developments took place for making the location traffic free and reliable. In 2007, the parking for staff and public has been same which is on the eastern side of hospital road in between city road and hospital road, now the parking for public and staff is different, the staffs parking area is same as 2007 but public parking area has changed to the eastern side of the hospital. This initiative increased the space for allocating more number of vehicles.
Then they have developed two round abouts in the intersection of the ring road and hospital road and also city road and hospital road. This made the f
car parking
busstops
roundabouts
saperate bus station
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response identifies the main features, such as the addition of roundabouts and the changes to parking and bus access. However, the response is incomplete; it ends abruptly mid-sentence ('This made the f'), failing to finish the description of the changes or provide a complete summary. While the overview is present, the lack of completion significantly impacts the task achievement. The description of the parking changes is somewhat confusing, and the inclusion of a list of keywords at the end of the text is inappropriate for an IELTS task. To improve, ensure all points are fully developed and the response is concluded properly.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay attempts to use paragraphing, but the structure is undermined by the incomplete nature of the final paragraph. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Overall' and 'Since 2007', but the flow is disrupted by the abrupt ending and the inclusion of a list of words at the bottom of the text. The referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly when describing the parking areas, which makes the progression of ideas difficult to follow. To reach a higher band, focus on maintaining a logical flow throughout the entire response and ensure that each paragraph is fully developed and connected to the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task, using terms like 'drastically changed', 'efficient traffic control', and 'initiatives'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'the structure of map' (should be 'the map's structure') and 'allocating more number of vehicles' (should be 'accommodating a greater number of vehicles'). The vocabulary is generally functional but lacks the precision and sophistication required for higher bands. Expanding your range of descriptive verbs and nouns related to urban planning would be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'the diagrams given below displays' (subject-verb agreement error), 'the parking for staff and public has been same' (missing article), and 'two round abouts' (spelling/compounding error). Punctuation is also inconsistent, and the sentence structure becomes fragmented towards the end. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of errors is noticeable and occasionally distracts the reader. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct article usage will help improve your accuracy.
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