Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the diagram the map shows that the situation of the road between the period of 2007 and 2010 of the road of the city hospital and the main features.

In 2007 the map show road access to the city hospital around the hospital the ring road. The city road south side of the city hospital further more, between the city hospital and the city road is hospital road. Car park, staff and public are the east side of the hospital road. In 2010 the city hospital changed and added the roundabout. In 2010 around the city hospital the ring road and the east side of the city hospital public car park are built in 2010 and addition to, built the roundabout on the north and south side of the hospital road on the this road west side is bus station and the east side of the road make the staff car park and make the roundabout on the city road.

In the conclusion in 2007 the city hospital are simple and face many problems after 2010 the built a proper and every on the place.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to describe the changes between the two maps, but the information is presented in a fragmented and often confusing manner. While you identify some key features like the roundabout and the car parks, the description lacks a clear overview or a logical comparison of the spatial changes. The summary of the 2007 map is somewhat unclear, and the conclusion is subjective rather than analytical, failing to report the main features objectively. To improve, focus on grouping information logically (e.g., road changes vs. facility changes) and ensure you provide a clear, concise overview of the most significant changes.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the flow of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often repetitive (e.g., 'In 2010', 'In 2007'). Sentences are often strung together without clear logical markers, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of changes. Referencing is also unclear; for instance, 'the situation of the road' is vague. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in contrast' to connect your ideas more fluidly and improve the overall structure.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple nouns and verbs like 'road', 'hospital', 'built', and 'make'. There is little attempt to use more precise or academic vocabulary suitable for describing maps, such as 'constructed', 'relocated', 'extended', or 'demolished'. Some phrasing is awkward, such as 'the situation of the road' and 'every on the place'. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more specific terminology related to urban planning and spatial descriptions, and focus on using more accurate collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the map show'), missing articles, and awkward sentence structures that lack complexity. Most sentences are simple, and there is a lack of variety in grammatical structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent, which affects the readability of the text. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and practicing the use of complex sentences to demonstrate a wider range of grammatical control.

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