Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given maps below illustrate the changes made to the road access of the city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Overall, there are significant improvement occur in city hospital at a time interval of 2007 to 2010. There is accessibility to the bus and parking facilities. The main changes was about the construction of roundabouts and relocation of car parks, bus stop also expansion of it.
In year 2007, city hospital was surrounded by ring road connecting with the city road through hospital road. Beside the hospital road, there used to be car park for staff and public which is replaced by staff car park in year 2010. There used to be a bus stop away from city hospital is now at the left side of the hospital road. It is an easy access for people to visit hospital. The public car park is at right side of city hospital joined with ring road. And a change like two roundabout is added to ring road and city road.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the maps, including the addition of roundabouts and the reconfiguration of car parks and bus stops. However, the overview is slightly weak; while it mentions 'significant improvement,' it lacks a clear summary of the most striking spatial changes. The description of the 2007 map is clear, but the 2010 section could be more precise regarding the specific locations of the new facilities. The response addresses the prompt adequately but would benefit from a more analytical approach to the comparisons between the two years rather than just listing changes.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, moving from an introduction/overview to specific details. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'In year 2007' and 'The public car park is at right side,' though some transitions feel a bit mechanical. The referencing is generally clear, but there are instances where the flow is slightly hampered by awkward phrasing, such as the transition between the description of the bus stop and the car park. Overall, the information is presented in a coherent manner that is easy to follow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, using terms like 'roundabouts,' 'relocation,' and 'accessibility.' However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'significant improvement occur' (should be 'occurred') and 'at right side' (should be 'on the right side'). The range is sufficient to convey the necessary information, but it lacks the sophistication or precision required for a higher band. The repetition of 'city hospital' and 'hospital road' could be mitigated by using synonyms or referring to the locations more concisely.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'The main changes was' (subject-verb agreement), 'bus stop also expansion of it' (fragmented structure), and 'a change like two roundabout is added' (pluralization error). While these errors are noticeable, they do not impede the reader's understanding of the information. To improve, the student should focus on subject-verb agreement and ensuring that all clauses are complete and correctly linked.
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