Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Firstly, In 2007, center in the city hospital and nest side ring road secondly, opposite side hospital road also, right side car park for staff and public. on the other hand, right side of the hospital to a bus stop.
Secondly, In 201, there are many changes in city hospital. center in the city hospital and opposite side is a ring road and right side of hospital public car park space. moreover, roundabout is center on the hospital road, and left side of hospital road to a bus station on other hand, right side staff car parking space. lastly, one more roundabout to right city road.
In conclude, there are many changes of road access to a city hospital in 2010 compare to 2007. it is a good for people and do not interpret the traffic.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to describe the changes between the two maps, but the information is presented in a fragmented and often confusing manner. While you identify some key features like the car parks and the bus station, the lack of clear spatial descriptions makes it difficult for the reader to visualize the changes. You fail to provide a clear overview or summary of the main trends, such as the addition of roundabouts and the reorganization of access roads. The description of the 2010 map is particularly difficult to follow due to the lack of precise locational language.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks logical progression. While you use transition words like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'In conclude', they are used mechanically and do not effectively link ideas or guide the reader through the spatial changes. The paragraphing is present but does not serve to organize the information logically; for instance, the description of the 2007 map is jumbled. Referencing is often unclear, as phrases like 'center in the city hospital' do not clearly describe the layout of the road network relative to the hospital building.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic directional words like 'right side' and 'left side'. There is a lack of precise terminology required for describing maps, such as 'intersect', 'adjacent to', 'relocated', or 'constructed'. Errors in word choice, such as 'do not interpret the traffic' (likely meaning 'disrupt' or 'impede'), significantly hinder the clarity of your message. You need to expand your range of descriptive nouns and verbs to accurately convey spatial relationships and changes over time.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammar is frequently inaccurate, which often obscures the meaning. There are consistent errors in sentence structure, such as 'center in the city hospital and nest side ring road', which lacks a main verb. Punctuation is also problematic, with incorrect capitalization and missing articles throughout the text. The response consists mostly of simple, fragmented phrases rather than complete, grammatically correct sentences. To improve, focus on constructing full sentences with a clear subject, verb, and object, and work on the correct use of prepositions of place.
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