Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The both maps below show road access to a city
hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the data by selected and reported the
main feature and make analysis wherever relevant.
The two maps to comparison in first maps in 2007
in City Hospital and second maps to City Hospital in 2010. The City Hospital to North side to Ring Road .
The South side to Hospital Road and Hospital to East side in car park ,staff and public . The Hospital Road
to right and left side to signal light .
The second maps to explain in city hospital 2010.
The Ring Road to East side to public car park and City
Hospital to North side to Ring Road . The City hospital
to South side in roundabout. The Roundabout to west side to Bus station and north to South in Hospital . The Roundabout to east side to staff car park . The link in Hospital Road to roundabout to a East side to City Road.
The two maps to comparison in City Hospital in 2007 and 2010 to explain in compass through and roundabout through in explain
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to describe the changes between the two maps, but it fails to provide a clear overview or effectively highlight the main trends. While it mentions some features like the roundabout and car parks, the description is fragmented and lacks a logical summary of the significant developments, such as the replacement of traffic lights with a roundabout. The inclusion of the task instructions in the opening paragraph is unnecessary and indicates a misunderstanding of the task requirements. To improve, you should focus on grouping information logically (e.g., road changes vs. facility changes) and providing a clear summary of the most notable changes between 2007 and 2010.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is difficult to follow because the sentences are disjointed and lack cohesive devices to link ideas. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs is weak, with repetitive sentence starters like 'The... to...' and 'The... in...'. There is no clear progression of information; the reader struggles to understand the spatial relationships between the hospital, the roads, and the car parks. To improve, use transition words such as 'furthermore', 'in contrast', or 'subsequently' to connect your ideas and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic nouns and prepositions. There is a lack of precise terminology to describe map features (e.g., 'signal light' instead of 'traffic lights', 'link in Hospital Road' instead of 'the road was extended'). Many phrases are used incorrectly, such as 'maps to comparison', which hinders clarity. To improve, you should learn specific vocabulary related to describing maps and changes, such as 'constructed', 'demolished', 'converted', 'extended', and 'relocated', and practice using these in context to describe spatial changes accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammar is consistently inaccurate, with frequent errors in sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and preposition usage. Almost every sentence contains a grammatical error, such as 'The both maps below show' (should be 'Both maps below show') and 'The two maps to comparison' (should be 'The two maps compare'). There is no evidence of complex sentence structures, and the basic sentence patterns are often malformed. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically the use of articles, correct verb tenses for describing past changes, and proper prepositional phrases to describe locations.
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