Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given two maps showcases major additions and changes across the road access to the city hospital between 2007 and 2010.

Overall, the changes include seperation of staff park and public park where the public one was inaugrated to the right of ring road. Addition of bus station and two roundabout on hospital road .

In 2007, the car park was congested with both staff and public cars, then in modern map the same place was reserved for only staff while the public one was newly established to east side of the city hospitial connecting the ring road .

While the 2007 road system was simple and straight forward, it left no room for improvements on the empty side on left, where bus station was later built, for which, 2 roundabouts were added to ease up the traffic on both city road and hospital road where it connects the way to both bus riders and car ones

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the maps, including the separation of parking facilities, the addition of the bus station, and the new roundabouts. However, the description of the locations is occasionally imprecise, such as describing the new public car park as being to the 'east side' when it is clearly located to the south-east. While the main trends are identified, the report lacks a more analytical approach to the spatial changes. To reach a higher band, ensure that all directional references are accurate and that the comparison between the two years is more clearly structured to highlight the transformation of the hospital's infrastructure.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. There is a clear progression of ideas from the general changes to specific details. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally awkward, such as the phrase 'for which, 2 roundabouts were added'. Additionally, some sentences are run-on or lack smooth transitions, which slightly disrupts the flow. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that referencing (e.g., 'the same place') is always clear would enhance the overall coherence of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the writer to describe the changes to the hospital access. There are some spelling errors, such as 'seperation' and 'inaugrated', and minor word-choice issues like 'modern map' instead of 'the 2010 map'. While the range is sufficient to convey the main points, it lacks the sophistication and precision required for higher bands. Using more precise terminology for infrastructure (e.g., 'junctions', 'access points', 'designated') would elevate the quality of the writing and demonstrate a more flexible control of language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('two roundabout') and punctuation errors, such as unnecessary spaces before commas. Some sentences are slightly disjointed, particularly the final sentence, which is overly long and lacks grammatical clarity. While these errors do not significantly impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on proofreading for basic agreement and punctuation, as well as refining complex sentence construction, will help improve accuracy.

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