Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The both maps beneath illustrates road approach to hospital of a city in 2007 and 2010.
After refurbishment, the bus station uploaded between city hospital and city road while, bus stop was beside to city hospital. And the other things are almost same before and after.
In 2007, the city hospital was totally covered by a ring road and in South side from city road the hospital road enters to the medical center. There was a parking on the right side of hospital road. After that in 2010, there was a ring road all over the town clinic. In South side of the ring road a bus station was built like O shape and also O shape bus station was built on the other side of city road. Between both station there is a hospital road. A car parking for staff was beside to hospital road and caar parking for public was on East side of ring road.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to describe the changes between the two maps, but it fails to provide a clear overview or highlight the most significant trends. The description of the layout is often confusing, such as the mention of 'O shape' bus stations, which does not accurately reflect the visual data. Furthermore, the report lacks a clear summary of the main changes, such as the introduction of the roundabout and the separation of parking facilities. While the response covers the basic elements, the lack of precision in reporting the spatial relationships and the failure to synthesize the information effectively limits the score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. The transition between the 2007 and 2010 descriptions is abrupt, and the use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'and' to connect ideas. Referencing is often unclear; for example, the phrase 'the other things are almost same' is vague and does not help the reader navigate the comparison. The overall structure lacks the cohesive flow required for a higher band, making the information feel disjointed.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'uploaded' instead of 'located' or 'constructed', and 'beside to' instead of 'beside' or 'next to'. The description of the maps relies on basic, imprecise language. To improve, you should focus on using more accurate terminology for spatial descriptions (e.g., 'situated', 'adjacent to', 'intersecting') and avoid repeating simple words like 'thing' or 'side'. The spelling error 'caar' also detracts from the overall quality.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('The both maps... illustrates'), incorrect preposition usage ('in South side from'), and awkward sentence construction. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the errors in basic grammar (articles, prepositions, and verb forms) are persistent throughout the text. Improving your control over basic sentence structure and proofreading for common errors would significantly enhance your score.
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