Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The provided map graph represent road access to a town hospital from 2007 to 2010.

Overall, there was an excess change in case of city hospital where the area of bus stop was totally demolished in the given time period.

It is crystal clear that in the northern side, the ring road and city hospital remain at same place in the given time period. Nevertheless, in the eastern side, the bus stop become totally diminsh however the public car park was built near city hospital in the given time period.

Moving further, the place of car park for public and staff was converted for only staff car park as in the center, the straight hospital road changed into the roundabout in the near of city hospital and city road. Nonetheless, in the western side, the bus station was built whereas the the city road remain at same place in the given time period.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have successfully identified the main features of the maps, such as the introduction of the roundabout and the changes to the car parks. However, the response lacks precision in describing the locations. For instance, you mention the 'eastern side' for the bus stop, but the map shows it in the south-east. Additionally, the term 'excess change' is not appropriate for describing map developments. To reach a higher band, ensure that you provide a more accurate overview of the spatial changes and avoid vague descriptors. The summary of the key trends is present, but the lack of specific detail regarding the layout changes limits the overall impact of the report.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of information. You use some cohesive devices like 'Nevertheless', 'Moving further', and 'Nonetheless' to link ideas. However, some of these transitions feel slightly mechanical or are used in contexts where they do not quite fit the flow of the description. The referencing is generally clear, but the overall structure could be improved by grouping the changes more logically—for example, focusing on road infrastructure versus facility changes—rather than just moving geographically around the map.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several instances of inaccurate word choice and spelling errors. For example, you use 'diminsh' instead of 'diminished' and 'excess change' instead of 'significant changes'. The phrase 'in the near of' is non-standard; 'near' or 'in the vicinity of' would be more appropriate. To improve, focus on using more precise terminology for map descriptions, such as 'demolished', 'constructed', 'relocated', or 'converted', and ensure you are using these words in their correct grammatical forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'the bus stop become totally diminsh' (tense and spelling error) and 'the the city road' (repetition). You also struggle with article usage and prepositions, such as 'in case of city hospital' and 'in the northern side'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage will significantly improve your score.

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