Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Given information illustrates access to a city hospital in two different years 2007 and 2010.
overall, there are many changes and upgraded places. Although some remain same such as, bus station, public and staff car park.
The year of 2007, ring road was located in north side of the map and cover city hospital. Moreover, ring road connect to the hospital road. car park: staff and public beside of the bus stop. Additionally, hospital road and city road connect each other. City road located in south side in a map.
The year of 2010, ring road and city hospital has same place but ring road connect to the public car park also. Furthermore, there are two roundabout introduce in 2010. However, bus stand connected to the roundabout. Roundabot was located in hospital road. they connect whole city. Lastly, staff car park upgraded and connect to the ring road. While, city road and hospital road remain on same place.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the maps, such as the addition of roundabouts and changes to road access. However, the description is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear, analytical overview. While the prompt asks for a summary, the response reads more like a list of observations. The comparison between 2007 and 2010 is present, but the development of these points is limited. To reach a higher band, you should focus on grouping information more logically (e.g., focusing on road changes vs. parking changes) rather than describing each year in isolation. The overview provided is very brief and could be more descriptive regarding the significant infrastructure changes.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'The year of 2007' is used as a sentence starter without a preposition, and 'While, city road...' is used incorrectly as a sentence fragment. Transitions between sentences are sometimes abrupt, making the flow feel disjointed. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'in contrast', 'furthermore') and ensure that referencing (e.g., 'they', 'this') clearly points back to the intended noun.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is adequate to convey the basic information, but it is quite repetitive and lacks precision. Phrases like 'same place' and 'upgraded places' are simplistic. There are also issues with collocation, such as 'bus stand connected to the roundabout' and 'beside of the bus stop'. The range of vocabulary is limited to basic descriptive terms, which restricts the ability to describe the spatial changes with nuance. To improve, incorporate more precise terminology related to maps and urban planning, such as 'intersection', 'junction', 'relocated', or 'expanded'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('in north side of the map', 'in a map') and prepositions ('beside of'). Verb tense usage is inconsistent, and there are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'ring road connect to the hospital road'). While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the text from reaching a higher band. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically the use of articles and correct prepositional phrases, before attempting more complex structures.
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